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Re: A.K.A. I Suck

Postby Almostlity » Jan 29th, '09, 14:24

I liked it, especially this line ''So fuck physical just fear lyrical'' :shifty:
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> Alm still goat

> Alm goat


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Re: A.K.A. I Suck

Postby Ka0t1c » Jan 29th, '09, 14:51

i liked most of it, you definitely have the rhymes, just improve more on what you're talking about and progress from it, try not to be too impressive if that makes any sense
oh yeah... and thanks for nothing too
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Re: A.K.A. I Suck

Postby theJFKshow » Jan 29th, '09, 16:36

It's alright. You are sacrificing good lyrics and content for words that rhyme.
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Re: A.K.A. I Suck

Postby Solace » Jan 29th, '09, 22:31

It was actually good man :y: Only this part was bad:

Wait this ain’t what I try to be
Maybe I got another side of me
Virtual or real, digital or physical
The spit I deal is damn near mythical
So fuck physical just fear lyrical
Damn’t I’m out, it’sa fuckin miracle


cause it was completely different flow and structure than the other lines. Decent dude, 8/10 :y:
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Re: A.K.A. I Suck

Postby Rain Matrix » Jan 29th, '09, 23:14

nah you don't suck, keep dropping dude
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