untitled practicing

[gutawafang]

sup mate, uck fay, right now i'ma update
fuck great, dubbed tape, like an ideal sub-state
i feel like throwing this crap and yell to you
and i'm showing this rap to tell something new

wait, at this rate, i'ma be dead, enough said
blades, i got traits, suicidal thoughts, rough day
fuck daylight, wonder what's my pay like
i gotta say bright, rhymes gotta stay tight

gave me hell, bruises swell, i need words of comfort
verbally i can't spell, you hurt and your words curt
now i'ma curl myself up in a ball and cry
i want the world to myself, would you call me tonight

you're the forth stanza to every poem i write
you're the bonanzas and you know'em they blight
they erase themselves when you gone outside
i need to embrace myself, till then dear swan, with pride

[Slim Zaddy]

gave me hell, bruises swell, i need words of comfort
verbally i can't spell, you hurt and your words curt
now i'ma curl myself up in a ball and cry
i want the world to myself, would you call me tonight

i liked these man ,, you got a unique style of writing ..i dont like the concept though but it flowed pretty well and what kept it flowed well are the in-rhymes used by you so good man, , rhymes also are good , lyric's still simple but you kept them tight here ,, it's kinda look like a poem to me ,, so it was good practicing , keep practicing

[gutawafang]

Thanks a lot z em for always feeding me. I WILL PRACTICE man! It's become my hobby ever since Anonymus taught me a few things. I'm soooooooooooo glad i joined trshady!

[Slim Zaddy]

Thanks a lot z em for always feeding me. I WILL PRACTICE man! It's become my hobby ever since Anonymus taught me a few things. I'm soooooooooooo glad i joined trshady!

we're glad to have here too ...