Mind tricks

[mcZu]

Mind tricks

Soul has folded, no bluff nor calling for courage
Roar’s forged with a noise so stalling the core’s age
Stuck in-between timeless mindless dimensions in vein
So the metabolism is keeping the hunger stuck in a maze
Directions advising detours, inertia is taking a sea crew
So down the surface has surfaced a mystical verbal
Persuaded by the dissonant figures of logical consistent
Painting lyrical subconscious thoughts in a row of mist and,
.. staying in the fog with a lost mind seeking for the quest
...while the anorexia like sentences find it hard to digest
Food for thought that can cause food poison with a twist
Of a hidden cure in each verse that will box in this sick..
Mental way of portraying stained pages of my mind state
Anxious days try to stay vividly aged in a weeks date
My mind tries to awake after the dot behind my ode
The rhymes tick subsequently… like Morse code

Feed would be appreciated, especialy on the flow, 'cause I feel that the flow is off at some points..

[gutawafang]

The rhymes tick subsequently… like Morse code
That line was dramatic, a perfect punchline.

Overall, the vocab's the best part of the lyrics. Flow wise, little.

[mcZu]

^Thanks for the feed bro

[Purple23Haze]

WORD UP MCzu

[°[~CHR!$~]°]

yeah also had trouble flowing... i dont know you could work on some multies...cuz that what was missing...know where im coming from...
vocab was good man,structure could be a lil better..but i think with them multies it will...
my advice..work on multies