New world

[mcZu]

New world

I spit heat like the dessert in Saudi Arabia
Testing wit, seated in a throne in Mesopotamia
Babylon height like complexity inside of me
Digesting the reality inclining the end of me
Thoughts flying out my head like a Trojan horse
Fought until the death when I had oiled my force
Flexible wielding each verse and each rhyme
Tangible seeking for verbs and ingenuous lines
Mysterious feeble rhythms like Semitic writing
Serious, deeply and sealing transmitted mind tricks
Injecting ginseng into your brain and let it sink
Thickening insane patterns stained with ink
Emitting visible visual black Henna on your skin
Scarring you for life with mental metal in sync
With the afterlife flick, beyond this material world
Staple the leafs of mayhem in front the new world

Third piece in one day , anyways feedback would be appreciated

[°[~CHR!$~]°]

much more better than your Mind Tricks-piece...
really great flow and muties...enjoyed it...like a 9.998/10

[mcZu]

^Thanks for checking it out man, appreciate it

[neversnooze]

you had excellent multies(nice words used). your rhyming was right on point. the flow was great. the only thing i disliked about this was the metaphors for writing. for example semetic writing, ink, lines , rhymes. people are overusing it and im getting sick of it lol. its not you personally just the use of comparison with the write or pen.

good job mczu, i was speaking generally. you used it well.

8/10

[gutawafang]

Pretty good vocabs dude. Really.

Scarring you for life with mental metal in sync

8/10. There's some kind of a difficulty for me to rap it out, as usual. I mean, I usually say the same thing, don't I?

[mcZu]

you had excellent multies(nice words used). your rhyming was right on point. the flow was great. the only thing i disliked about this was the metaphors for writing. for example semetic writing, ink, lines , rhymes. people are overusing it and im getting sick of it lol. its not you personally just the use of comparison with the write or pen.

good job mczu, i was speaking generally. you used it well.

8/10

I feel ya, it's cliche to write about that kind of things.. Thanks for the feed appreciate it

Pretty good vocabs dude. Really.

Scarring you for life with mental metal in sync

8/10. There's some kind of a difficulty for me to rap it out, as usual. I mean, I usually say the same thing, don't I?

Naah you don't, thanks for checking my piece out bro and feeding it, really appreciate it

[Slim Zaddy]

New world

I spit heat like the dessert in Saudi Arabia
Testing wit, seated in a throne in MesopotamiaThoughts flying out my head like a Trojan horse
Fought until the death when I had oiled my force
Flexible wielding each verse and each rhyme
Tangible seeking for verbs and ingenuous lines
Mysterious feeble rhythms like Semitic writing
Serious, deeply and sealing transmitted mind tricks
Injecting ginseng into your brain and let it sink
Thickening insane patterns stained with ink
Emitting visible visual black Henna on your skin
Scarring you for life with mental metal in sync
With the afterlife flick, beyond this material world
Staple the leafs of mayhem in front the new world

Third piece in one day , anyways feedback would be appreciated

man really i was amazed , you got a great skills in multies , soudie line is sick and clever, lyrics and rhymes were sick enough , flow was easy cuz of the nice multies and methapors you have in this piece , i really loved it . keep writing man ,, REALLy keep it up.. 9/10

[mcZu]

^Thanks for the feed Z_Em, appreciate yuo checking it out

[Riisi]

Nice flow and good multies and the end was just the greatest! keep doin at whats your good at!

[mcZu]

^Thanks bro, appreciate you checking it out and feeding