Untitled Conspiracy Theory Movement verse one

[Mysterious]

Just wrote this today, plan on contributing a lot to this site in the future... This is about the government, it's just what I like writing about...

Can't you see what they doin to you?
It's sad but it's true, and there's nothing you can do,
unless, you realize the mess we in,
we stick our necks out and do the best that we can,
to survive, and make sure that our lives have meaning,
and believe me, this is just the beginning,
let me remind you of a little history, and
tell me, why 9/11 was such a mystery,
and why building 7 was never put into history,
it was demolished, like a demolition,
it was the governments mission to kill
all those innocent victims,
would they do such a god-awful thing?
Because of god-awful dreams,
only thoughtful to one thing,
oil,
and it was a god-awful scheme

I would like honest reviews, thank you

[MC Anonymous]

Just wrote this today, plan on contributing a lot to this site in the future... This is about the government, it's just what I like writing about...

Can't you see what they doin to you?
It's sad but it's true, and there's nothing you can do,
unless, you realize the mess we in,
we stick our necks out and do the best that we can,
to survive, and make sure that our lives have meaning,
and believe me, this is just the beginning,
let me remind you of a little history, and
tell me, why 9/11 was such a mystery,
and why building 7 was never put into history,
it was demolished, like a demolition,
it was the governments mission to kill
all those innocent victims,
would they do such a god-awful thing?
Because of god-awful dreams,
only thoughtful to one thing,
oil,
and it was a god-awful scheme

I would like honest reviews, thank you

Well I see potential, but you need to learn about structure. Here lemme try something.

Can't you see what they doin to you?
It's really sad but it's true,
and there's nothing you can do,
unless, you realize the mess we in,
we stick our necks out, and do the best we can,
to survive, & make sure that our lives have meaning,
and believe me, this is just the beginning,
let me remind you of a little history,
and tell me, why 9/11 was such a mystery,
and why building 7 was never put into history,
it was demolished, like a demolition,
it was the governments mission to kill
all those innocent victims,
would they do such a god-awful thing?
Because of god-awful dreams,
only thoughtful to one thing,
oil,and it was a god-awful scheme

Now I restructured you piece, took out some words, and added some words in it. Now it's easier for the reader to pick up your flow, and vibe to it a little more. You should consider learning about multi syllable rhymes so you can spice up your drops. Very good first post though. 7/10

[Solace]

Really, MC Anonymous pretty much summed it up. Glad to have another writer with us! The creative writing section has been booming lately