Cheating Kills....

[MC Anonymous]

Release my pressure, step together, jump on to the floor
already sore, panic filled as the blood pumps from my core
adrenaline serpents in veins, as I walk down the hallway
knife held with the OK, to kill anyone if they all spray
silently walk past, doors slippin' behind the wood creaks
man the hood speaks, told me to kill those dudes with beaks
knock on the door, no answer, then I smash it with my fist
papers fly in the air, aroma of blood lingers on my left wrist
I hear screams, weeping pleas, asking me to go away
on they knees they pray, then I stab her in the vertebrae
''Cheating bitch, WHY did you do it'' I scream with anguish
eyes bulging from my skull, and all my morals vanquish
berserk in tears, smiling in the face of my twisted fate
her life was lifted straight, ''Now all I got is gifted hate''
I walk past the corpse, see a man waiting at the door
eyes wide, panic stricken, frozen straight in his core
I smile, insanity symbolism shining from a bloody blade
he begins to cry, shaking, basking in eternal shade
''My life is meaningless, If I kill you now they will die
along with you worthless children, mother, father, and I
I speak with no soul, heart's coal, you cheating fuck
every time you were banging my girl, you were beating luck
now look at you, crying tears of regret, time can't change
the pain you enslaved my pen to write from a damn cage
Now I'm here, determining the fate of one who determined mine
BITCH, don't FUCKING look at me and say you don't wanna die
You chose this route, I never fucked your girl, because I
was a guy of morals and virtues, now it's all to the way side
life was a liberty you didn't want, so I'll be the grim reaper
You want my bitch, -throw the corpse- go ahead, KEEP HER''
Swing the blade, slice the guys neck, pull out a tech
blast my face for respect, end my life without any checks
by the government of heaven, or the dictatorship of hell
when will the bell toll next? only a lifetime will tell.....

[MC Anonymous]

Nice story telling Still nice multies and vocab I liked how dark it was Really nice stuff man

Thanks bro

[gutawafang]

As Coleon said, good storytelling man!

[mcZu]

That was a great story, story telling skills were superb. Lyrics and rhyme-pattern was great, just the flow trew me off at a couple points, nothing severe tough, pretty vivid painting you portrayed and I enjoyed readin each line. Couldn't spot any overused words or rhymes, mutlies were there and the shot of lyrisicme was enough to get the readers drunk. Good job

[Rain Matrix]

this was a good read sometimes it's better to rhyme a scenario then make it reality cuz lord knows I'd be locked up by now if not for that

[James R.]

Awesome story man. Good vocab and multies. I feed you the same feed every single time lol, so just apply it all to this one plus the storytelling bit.