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picking myself up

Postby gutawafang » Feb 10th, '09, 15:18

I'm surrounded by pain which you claim that I feign
But it's in my reign, which you say it's my bane
Is it a boon? Why am I so full of myself like the moon
I won't deny this is true, I need fucking lies sung in tune
Am I just another nonstarter, never meant to SUCceed
I'm a fucking born sucker, even it sucks when I struck shits
I attempt to get rid of this pain left that dissolves me
I was tempted to shit on this insane bereft that involves me
Am I merely placing my thoughts in words
Or am I only the only one facing rots cuz it hurts
Even though I'm verbally expressing, I'm literally idiotic
Mentally prehistoric with lines purely episodic
I need the doctor, then comes a nurse, "fuck her!"
I need to inject myself, I need assistance, proctor
I got to help myself up lest I'ma just lie on the bed
I don't need no more death cups, I'ma just die on this day
Let the voice of me speak, how it's the rhythm of weak
Just let me pick myself up, fuck it in this system so bleak
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Re: picking myself up

Postby gutawafang » Feb 11th, '09, 05:09

FEED? LOL. I guess... :happy:
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Re: picking myself up

Postby Purple23Haze » Feb 11th, '09, 05:24

what did you mean by boon?
It was pretty in depth like a sincere proposal
dope flow okay well it was at least so so, so
sow shit up! breathe a fuck! exhale into your nuts, with energy
Imagine that bitch extensively intensively represent me
Infinity eternity burnin' me definitely no concern for me
I learn I see I yurn I be I turn I leap I word up street
With traction in my attire I'm on fire sorry I can't stop
Mad props though drop moats bend so my boat can float
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Re: picking myself up

Postby gutawafang » Feb 11th, '09, 05:39

Purple23Haze, thank you for your feed! I feel ya man. I know what you mean. :y:
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Re: picking myself up

Postby Slim Zaddy » Feb 11th, '09, 15:29

well i think it's nice man ,, the flow seems mush improved , rhymes were nice too beside lyrics , concept was there , i think it's good , you need the beat and a mic , and that's it .. :b: :y: :y:
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Re: picking myself up

Postby gutawafang » Feb 12th, '09, 01:56

z_em wrote:well i think it's nice man ,, the flow seems mush improved , rhymes were nice too beside lyrics , concept was there , i think it's good , you need the beat and a mic , and that's it .. :b: :y: :y:


LOL. I should record this?

I mean, I wanna. But I want a longer one this time. So... :happy:

Thanks man. :)
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