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Postby Ka0t1c » Feb 13th, '09, 05:18

i'll face you, there's no chasing me away, this place is where i stay
i'm here and i don't care what you think - i swear i will be okay
it's time to clear A way or the air we'll share til that very day
appears i lay down bare and sink to the interior decayed

no barriers can bring my career delayed, my premier just may
make me merrier, you say i'm inferior, impaired by the terror's near
my area but i'm the carrier of a bacteria i've prepared in my cafeteria
so beware cuz you're prey, i'm after material shuffling thru radio play
oh yeah... and thanks for nothing too
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Re: to be continued...maybe

Postby Slim Zaddy » Feb 13th, '09, 21:14

i liked by the way , you have the flow ,, it's good , but i did'nt like the rhymes ,, like stay , okay ,, these are weak,, need more vocab ,, but if you wanted to be simple like that then it's okay as long as the flow is okay ,, gd job here ,, keep it up :y:
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Postby mcZu » Feb 13th, '09, 22:00

Pretty good, the rhymes werent simple imo. Because the mutlies make up for it, it flowed great and the overal lyrics were enjoyable. :y:
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Postby Ka0t1c » Feb 14th, '09, 21:58

well, it's not for everyone but it does have a good flow for it
oh yeah... and thanks for nothing too
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