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NEW - Hour After Hour

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NEW - Hour After Hour

Postby Solace » Feb 15th, '09, 07:57

[Verse 1]
Getting angered every moment, sweating at night,
School's like being in a coma, I can't put up a fight,
Weak but I'll try, spit my shit, swallow my sorrow,
Thank god if I can get through today by tommorrow,
Yet y'all joke, y'all smirk, I can't get enough of it,
Love seeing you fake bastards acting all tough and shit,
It ain't enough to keep me down, you're just vexing me,
You can stall me all you want, but I'll reach my destiny,
The present isn't in a good shape, but I'ma change it,
Taken all of your insults and instead embraced it,
It's like trading places, went from loser to the top,
Got it locked mainly because not for a moment I stopped,
Sometimes I thought of quitting, couldn't comprehend it,
Wanted to press some 'off' button just to end it,
But times have been rougher and I've learned to cope,
Never paused this life man this isn't just a joke.

[Chorus x2]
Keep it coming fools, it doesn't phase me at all,
I'm persistent, what you say doesn't change me at all,
My words have a voice and I'ma just gunna scream louder,
Line after line, word by word, hour after hour.

[Verse 2]
Back to the story of a meaningless entity,
Only fourteen, another vacuous identiy,
Cornered; my whole life just a dodgeball game,
Just a one man army, and it's all I claim,
And all the chart's I'll reign, if I keep up this habit,
Lyrical backflips, study my mixtape, you can have it,
Riduculed daily, crazy how much bullshit I can stand,
Now I'm blazing, without a fucking mic in hand,
Stabilized heart rate in complicated mindsets,
Calm down, keep it cool, and let your mind rest,
Methods don't always work, it's been shown many times,
Writing is my outlet, I've let it burst on many lines,
Many rhymes are useless, I show off my pride,
My anger, my devotion, my bliss, and my lies,
Neglection I've coped with, but I feel curled,
A shadow, a dead demeaned being of the world

[Chorus x2]
Keep it coming fools, it doesn't phase me at all,
I'm persistent, what you say doesn't change me at all,
My words have a voice and I'ma just gunna scream louder,
Line after line, word by word, hour after hour.

To the beat "Coldblooded" by Mart85, check it on the TRShadyMusic channel if you haven't heard it.
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Re: NEW - Hour After Hour

Postby gutawafang » Feb 15th, '09, 14:55

Dope as usual Epiphany!

"Riduculed daily, crazy how much bullshit I can stand,
Now I'm blazing, without a fucking mic in hand"
Hail to that! :y:
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Re: NEW - Hour After Hour

Postby Solace » Feb 15th, '09, 19:09

gutawafang wrote:Dope as usual Epiphany!

"Riduculed daily, crazy how much bullshit I can stand,
Now I'm blazing, without a fucking mic in hand"
Hail to that! :y:

Thanks! :happy:
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Re: NEW - Hour After Hour

Postby Slim Zaddy » Feb 15th, '09, 20:07

i think it's pretty good shadymademe , i liked the concept though , you kept it simple but tight ,, i love second verse more and the chorus is pretty cool .. gd comeback bro ,, record this ,, :y: :y:
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Re: NEW - Hour After Hour

Postby Solace » Feb 15th, '09, 21:21

Chet Starr wrote:Can't wait to hear it man :smoking:

Thanks dude :smoking:

z_em wrote:i think it's pretty good shadymademe , i liked the concept though , you kept it simple but tight ,, i love second verse more and the chorus is pretty cool .. gd comeback bro ,, record this ,, :y: :y:

Thanks z_em, appreciate it! And yeah I am, eventually ;)
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Re: NEW - Hour After Hour

Postby neversnooze » Feb 16th, '09, 03:52

this was pretty good, but i can see this on a random laid back beat and not coldblooded. i think youve written about school before too , man you must really hate it lol.

it was an average write, the vocab was basic. it has the flow and rhyme

good write 8/10
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Re: NEW - Hour After Hour

Postby Solace » Feb 16th, '09, 06:35

neversnooze wrote:this was pretty good, but i can see this on a random laid back beat and not coldblooded. i think youve written about school before too , man you must really hate it lol.

it was an average write, the vocab was basic. it has the flow and rhyme

good write 8/10

Dude thanks for feeding, glad you thought it was good, enough though it was simple. lol yeah i dont really like school...Iunno but I like the Coldblooded beat on it, we'll see how it sounds, and if not then I'll find some VTZ beat :y:
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