I'm Satan

[gutawafang]

I like the show "Reaper". I'm so influenced by the show that I came up with this rhyme here. Here goes. It's simple I guess.

Hello, my name's SATAN, I'm evil and saTANIC
I make PATENT phrases, you people then PANIC
I'm the antagonist to any of your innocent PLOTs
And to the world too, which was created by GOD
My number one ENEMY, I'ma slice with ENERGY
Tear him apart in this MELODY, scrutinize this ANALOGY
Truth I'ma BREAK out, cuz tonight I'ma TAKE him out
With this weapon that'll WAKE him up, and FREAK him out
I've been waiting for so long, yeah so long, GOD
Cuz I'm far from so wrong, you ain't strong, LORD
I'ma spread my WINGS, and wrap you up MAN
Broken damn LINKS, I'ma "rap" you up DAMN
I was once an angel, but now I SUPPORT ASSHOLES
With these rhymes I'ma IMPORT your ass another MASS HOLE
Just let me SPEAK, I ain't WEAK, you should deFEND, DICK
I'm at my PEAK, this what you SEEK, you fucking ANTIQUE
I'm so FIRED, I need to disconnect myself from being WIRED
Cruelty's my DESIRE, I REQUIRE your backFIRE, SIRE
Damn, I used to LOVE you, why did you CAST me off
So now I'm about to jump aBOVE you, and BLAST you off
I'ma make you inCUR, make you enCOURage me like I do REAPERs
Then SIR, I'ma conQUER the world with EITHER one you PREFER
Would you want me to fuel the fire of WARFARE, make people KILL
Nuclear Palestine, make it NOT FAIR, do you FEEL
I'm SIR SATAN, I'm always the VOICE at the back of YOUR HEAD
It's SURE BLATANT, leave you no CHOICE but to seCURE THAT

[gutawafang]

BUMPING.

[Ka0t1c]

i don't think the 2 last words rhyme well which messes up the flow

i thought the piece wasn't Satanic enough, it's got good rhymes tho, just too soft for my liking

good vocab, good structure, decent rhyming, i recognize your flow very well and enjoyed how you wrote this part:

I'ma make you inCUR, make you enCOURage me like I do REAPERs
Then SIR, I'ma conQUER the world with EITHER one you PREFER

[gutawafang]

i don't think the 2 last words rhyme well which messes up the flow

i thought the piece wasn't Satanic enough, it's got good rhymes tho, just too soft for my liking

good vocab, good structure, decent rhyming, i recognize your flow very well and enjoyed how you wrote this part:

I'ma make you inCUR, make you enCOURage me like I do REAPERs
Then SIR, I'ma conQUER the world with EITHER one you PREFER

Thank you so much for your feed, Kaotic! I will try not to mess up next time!

[gutawafang]

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