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Postby Ka0t1c » Feb 18th, '09, 02:36

don't assume i won't illume in the room when i enter
remember i was sent to bring doom to anyone whom
has been a pretender since the very beginnin cuz you've
bent the truth since you drew a new blueprint to picture
that's a bigger adventure than you can handle
how did you figure, now it ruined your battle
from a human, then consumed by the devil you were
you went thru a different channel
what are you doin, the level
aint suited well for your travel
cuz confusion resumes to excel
bringing pressure to whatever so you'll fail forever
and never pursue your treasure
you loser, your maneuvers in the future better be ready to prevail
oh yeah... and thanks for nothing too
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Postby gutawafang » Feb 18th, '09, 08:05

Structure's everywhere. Didn't flow well though I can see the multis.

Yeah, I can't rap it out. But vocab wise, it's damn great man! :D
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