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NEW - Urban Punk - Paralyzed

Postby Urban Punk » Feb 18th, '09, 15:47

just something I wrote last night, it ant finished yet... its just the first draft though all feedbacks much appreciated :happy:

(Intro)


I shrug my shoulder’s, ahead of my year’s,
now acting older, in line with my per’s
behind these eye’s, I hide these fear’s
confused in disarray, I envision my demise


(Verse 1)

growing up paralyzed; in a state of surprise
I’m seldom seen… In the realm of hate,
though when I create, you debate, my mind state
label, me a monster, adolescent, youngster
you just don’t know , do you? do you realise… tha desolation I’ve survived?
homie call me insane, but through the pain, I’m tranquil,
optimistic, and thankful, for every critic,
an while society deprivin me, even my own family, hate…
the sight of me, wouldn’t it be great, if I could win the lottery
that way… I could pretty much, pay yall, to like me,
by you lunch, or even better a brand new per, of nikey air,
and even though… I’m broke, I’ma making it there,

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Last edited by Urban Punk on Feb 18th, '09, 19:03, edited 2 times in total.
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Re: NEW - Urban Punk - Paralyzed

Postby Le Tunisien » Feb 18th, '09, 18:15

i like this shet, real good flow and rhymes :y:
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Re: NEW - Urban Punk - Paralyzed

Postby Urban Punk » Feb 18th, '09, 19:03

thanks bro it means a lot
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Re: NEW - Urban Punk - Paralyzed

Postby noel » Feb 19th, '09, 00:04

cool- love the optimism amongst the despair... :smoking: :smoking: :smoking:
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Re: NEW - Urban Punk - Paralyzed

Postby Urban Punk » Feb 19th, '09, 13:39

Nice one! thanks' Noel... yep I'm going through a bit of a rough patch right now and its starting to show when write, anyways thanks for the feed...
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Re: NEW - Urban Punk - Paralyzed

Postby noel » Feb 20th, '09, 08:33

Urban Punk wrote:Nice one! thanks' Noel... yep I'm going through a bit of a rough patch right now and its starting to show when write, anyways thanks for the feed...



No Prob- I don't write but I like reading other peoples stuff.

I hope you get through it and become stronger

It is cool to see you use that stuff to your advantage!!
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Postby ¤°~ Jose ~¤°© » Feb 20th, '09, 17:37

good i liked it :)
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Re: NEW - Urban Punk - Paralyzed

Postby Urban Punk » Feb 22nd, '09, 16:04

thanks I appreciate the feed yall
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