Should I finish...

[mcZu]

...this piece? Constructive feed is more then appreciated.

Hollow bones
Written to this instrumental
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=jaFP8by9B3s&feature=related

Hollow bones, my mind can’t air out
Feeling air inside my marrow now
Can’t even straighten this arrow’s sound
Cupid looks stupid when I move around
Music sooths my smooth edged wound
Suited for truth seeking mastered fruit
Though the devil wants me to look at the D
Instead of true beauty coming from inside, his duty;
To leave me with Evil vinyl’s around my head
But he can’t surpass true love to death
My heart is pounding hard liquid fluids
Her art like face and her amazing movements
Are recorded in my head, inside my hemisphere
I have my mind on replay every single day of the year
Streaming the view of a pure angel who fell from above
Leaning on Zu’s ribcage from an angle of love….

[tjb]

find a new beat

[mcZu]

^well yeah the beat is a matter of taste, but what about the lyrics..some constructive feed yo. Though I appreciate you checking it out anyways.