To whom ever it may concern

[BuzzZ]

A yo dawg, i got some shit on my mind that i need to express
look look, i came to this site trying to progress
progress my rapping trying to make it to success
but im under pressure by All those willing to protest
against what i write, it's underneith my chest
close to my heart And in my mind is were i find my lines
rhyming for those who's wanting to pass the time
stuck at home, alone with shit on there minds
getting bullied by there daddy's, they Are on A fine line
between life And death,
wondering whats left, should i carry on or just put myself to rest
so let's sing for the moment, As eminem say's
A memory for All those who have messed up days
getting taunted, to tell them to end there life in wicked ways
what they see on tv and sickening plays
but who care's no boby nows there names
but just remember At that could of been you in your younger days

** respond if you want to stop All the hurting in the world **

or write your own rhyme about the matter in todays homes

[Solace]

PM a mod to move this to creative writing, cause this obviously wasnt a battle rap.

PS. To Whom It May Concern is my coming mixtape name

[gutawafang]

not bad Buzzz! You got flow. I could rap it well. But work on multis. Yeah.

[Slim Zaddy]

it was'nt bad bro , you had some good lines. you got the flow ,, which good though ,, just work on the structure and try to make it more complex,, by the mean of adding multies , metaphors, use some imagery these staff that make the piece looks tighter, and keep doin your thing ,, by time you will get better ,,,