Touch Ground

[Ka0t1c]

i'm in a different scene that i really aint used to
but lyrically i'm original so who's to
contend against me, you'll feel very miserable
if you're "pretending to be" material continues, you'd see
there's none identical to me while you're predictable
my rhythm's assembled with symmetry
and every single syllable speaks for itself
my skills are in need of any mc still on the shelf
cuz i'm willin to lead and to build up my wealth
until i'm killed to 6 feet below then i'm filled overwhelmed under silt
my soul shall expel the filth of our realm or i'd wilt
i won't retreat from everything we've been dealt
i need to eat and to keep up my health now, so i'm reachin for help
i'm the king of my hill, i doubt that i'll fall off my mound
i'm well mounted, i will - proceed to expel the Hell we seem to have felt
no boundaries can wall my powers at all, to stand tall
instead of cower is my motto, i'm called
to tower above and install in the love when it's found
each flower has flaws you encounter, no fraud
find a balance to solve your challenge involved
don't frown right upon your brothers, come on
i thought that was common law
i'm countin hours down like the Father, Allah
because i'm about to touch ground, you've drawn my last straw

[Ka0t1c]

what do y'all think???

[Arabian Shady]

i think this is aint your best, if seen you write better.
the begining seemed a little slow, picks up after the 4th bar, flow was good, could have been better but it suits the format, structure was okay, ending was tight man , these lines:

each flower has flaws you encounter, no fraud
find a balance to solve your challenge involved
don't frown right upon your brothers, come on
i thought that was common law

were absolutely sick, i loved them , deep thoughts right there, although i coudnt fully grasp the meaning of the last 2 bars, what did they mean bro?

all in all a solid drop

[Ka0t1c]

ok, what those lines mean are abstract which stand for ... nothing is perfect but try to find yourself and if somebody is down, don't put them down further, help em out if u can


thanx for reading but i don't think u understand where it rhymes at all the points if you're saying it picks up in the 4th line cuz it definitely is crazy throughout

[Arabian Shady]

lol i meant they comparatively pick up (ie make some sense) after the 4th line, lol

[Ka0t1c]

oh, ok, i understand you now, hmm....