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Fish Keystyle 3

Postby gutawafang » Mar 20th, '09, 03:42

Yo, I'ma spit this rhyme like how I did
You look like a retard, so damn stupid
Don't do music, you gonna lose it
These notes on score sheets, you ain't gonna use it

And check it out check it out check it out
I'ma kick it proud that I passed Java I'ma say it loud
Tell the whole world that I'm on the ninth cloud
Though I'm still trying to clear up my fine doubts

Let me spit on this microphone while you fucker stay back
Join the crowd and stand all the way back
I'm not about to fuck you up and say bad
Why not you address all your issues that you may have?

I'm about to step on the toes of this pussy
Cuz you pushed me, asshole, your words don't confuse me
Think before you say it and spray it, you're like a spammer
Let this Fish show you the fag and the glamor

I'ma edit the notes sung by this vocalist
I'ma alter his story, he calls himself a novelist?
Don't talk like your bighead is gonna suck my dick
Cuz it's going to, so fuck my lyrics
if you can.
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Re: Fish Keystyle 3

Postby Slim Zaddy » Mar 20th, '09, 13:33

good shit man ,, i love your flow .. lyrics and rhymes are just good , you had some good lines ,,you're getting better by each time , it's not your best drop , but i enjoyed it . it would fit as an audio too , so ya turn to audio section hahah . keep it up :y:
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Re: Fish Keystyle 3

Postby Drama Setter » Mar 20th, '09, 15:47

that was great specially first part . keep it gangsta :y:
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Re: Fish Keystyle 3

Postby Solace » Mar 20th, '09, 22:41

I dont see how its great^ but its definitely not bad. Enjoyed that you were using multies but the punches were bad, cept i liked this one "Join the crowd and stand all the way back" lmao :y: Keep it up Fishy :)
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Re: Fish Keystyle 3

Postby gutawafang » Mar 25th, '09, 08:45

Thank you all of you. I appreciate this. :happy:
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