yu gotta admit this is my best..... thoughts?

[Young Luc]

yo guys guess what life is a long tough road
dont get too stressed or yur head will explode
keep chasing yur dream dont stop or choke
make a healthy decision and do not smoke
always make and choose the right direction
i'd hate to see a life at a dead end intersection
and as for me i dont smoke or drink
thats becuz i give thought and i think
about the decisions im going to make
cuz i wanna be real and not just a fake
lead yur own life and take control
yu dont wanna hear bullets coming out the gun hole

[AOBrien09]

an improvement just keep at it your getting better. (in my opinion,don't hate me for it lol)

[Young Luc]

any more thoughts?

[Solace]

Glad you either took my advice or just had the sense to lengthen your lines...You got potential keep it up

[James R.]

You still suck, but this is monumentally less sucky than your other shit. Now that you have normal sized lines like a human you can start rhyming like a human as well. You can definitely rhyme 2 syllable words like "explode" could rhyme better with something other than tough road or w/e. Instead rhyme it with something like "next code" or "text hoes" or just something that actually rhymes with it. Once you get that down you can start experimenting with multies and once you're done sucking you can switch up your flow, but lets not get ahead of ourselves.