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Lyrical Slaughter

Postby mcZu » Apr 6th, '09, 17:45

Been a while since I dropped some shit; feedback appreciated as always.

Note: This started of as a diss, though I felt someone should be the bigger man...So I decided to flip it up and made it into a general dissing/bragging piece..

Face Zu and you will get ate/8 when I let the tech blow
Defuse it into 2 and 6 and I’ll show; that the 26th letter kills fo’ so’
It’s the Z -like after the jigga- low riding in a lyrical row
Your autopsy will end up in being a jigalow show
Automatic psychic like trigger squeezed with one blow
I get your hemisphere to separate from your scalp bro
So scrap your crap lame excuse of being rap yo
‘Cause I ridicule fake artists with just one arm twist
Nerves command the finger to bend in with a vicious list
Call me schindler, though I don’t save jewels but I save up money
I command phrases to move, you just re-phrase comedy....funny
Re-phase your destiny; I’ll end it with a re-fill of your chest
Read skills as your analyze my verse’s depth; In fact…
My lyrical moves contact with chess, black out the squares I infect
With a precision of real rap focused on a zero point trillion step
Of lyricism baptized in oxygen from Zeus’ thunder frictions
Shot from the Uzi reversed; 'I Zu' the king of wordplay occurs
Akon label ‘em when I write a verse behind my bars; a curse
Spoken on my enemies when I defuse the lit fuse and fuse it
With a sick bruise that blew out the stick broom and used it
Dropped the R and the cartoon like explosion morphed to it
Magneto packed heat yo when I derived magnets from heat so
I control heat without actually touching it, telekinesis brushing shit
Painting a dead silhouette with a spray pen stiletto inking the lines
Chalk replaced for colourful rhymes lining your dead body’s spine
Rigor mortis occurred in force with a liver like alcohol twist
Physics offered a spliff to unloosen gravity from my lyrical feet
Sciences measured my lyrical I Q’s; not in raw ki’s but in hip hop feet
Their equipment broke up when they got in the vicinity of this rap beast
Symmetry physically explains vividly my entity’s mystery;
Misery-- feeling alone; body all shivery -‘cause it’s cold on top-
Being me is all I can do; so you can’t stop me as I lyrically evolve
And revolve around the atmosphere like the sputnik satellite
I spew sick with music I fuse spit with ammonia battle light
Fire breath flow in it; until the whole game feels what I write…
"Truth is limitless in its range; if you drop a 'T' and look at it in reverse, it could hurt."
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Re: Lyrical Slaughter

Postby Emadyville » Apr 6th, '09, 18:00

I thought it was interesting, but too much random usage of words and combinations, I felt like I was reading a chemistry equation, as in this got boring really quick, and the rhymes were good but I've seen a lot better from you.
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Re: Lyrical Slaughter

Postby mcZu » Apr 6th, '09, 21:58

^Thanks for the feed man, appreciate it :y:
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Re: Lyrical Slaughter

Postby Noeezy » Apr 8th, '09, 08:30

Emadyville wrote:I thought it was interesting, but too much random usage of words and combinations, I felt like I was reading a chemistry equation, as in this got boring really quick, and the rhymes were good but I've seen a lot better from you.


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Re: Lyrical Slaughter

Postby J Roc » Apr 8th, '09, 20:49

Only Read The First 2 Lines .. All i got To Say Issss


Face Zu and you will get ate/8 when I let the tech blow

Ate/8??? ..... Uhh When u Use Wordplay , u Make Both Words Have Meaning To The Sentance ... Ur Using It Wrong

The THOUGHTS YOU TELL US? If u think tha Clips-Fake you'll Get-Eight/Ate Like WATERMELONS

Something like that , that has meaning to both words lol
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Re: Lyrical Slaughter

Postby mcZu » Apr 8th, '09, 20:59

^Appreciate your intake, but don't judge the piece just by the first bar...and if you really understood wordplay then you would have noticed that that 8 is use in the second line....

Thanks for checking MusicPimp
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Re: Lyrical Slaughter

Postby MC Anonymous » Apr 8th, '09, 21:02

J roc wrote:Only Read The First 2 Lines .. All i got To Say Issss


Face Zu and you will get ate/8 when I let the tech blow

Ate/8??? ..... Uhh When u Use Wordplay , u Make Both Words Have Meaning To The Sentance ... Ur Using It Wrong

The THOUGHTS YOU TELL US? If u think tha Clips-Fake you'll Get-Eight/Ate Like WATERMELONS

Something like that , that has meaning to both words lol

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He meant get shot 8 times. Next time try to understand before criticizing it. :y:
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Re: Lyrical Slaughter

Postby mcZu » Apr 8th, '09, 21:09

^Exactly; I used that in a couple of ways.. But it doesn't matter, I appreciate the fact that he took the time to reply..
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Re: Lyrical Slaughter

Postby Solace » Apr 8th, '09, 21:42

MC Anonymous wrote:
J roc wrote:Only Read The First 2 Lines .. All i got To Say Issss


Face Zu and you will get ate/8 when I let the tech blow

Ate/8??? ..... Uhh When u Use Wordplay , u Make Both Words Have Meaning To The Sentance ... Ur Using It Wrong

The THOUGHTS YOU TELL US? If u think tha Clips-Fake you'll Get-Eight/Ate Like WATERMELONS

Something like that , that has meaning to both words lol

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He meant get shot 8 times. Next time try to understand before criticizing it. :y:

Yeah lol, i thought it was pretty obvious. Very good piece, above average, above my standards lol, I was only reading through it not rapping it so I cant say much about flow but I liked it. :y:
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Re: Lyrical Slaughter

Postby mcZu » Apr 8th, '09, 21:44

^Thanks for checking Solace, glad you like it. About the flow; I had a certain flow in my head while writing, though it was off beat - didn't use a beat -
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Re: Lyrical Slaughter

Postby J Roc » Apr 8th, '09, 22:48

Ohh haha i skimmed the second one .... What u mean i don't understand wordplay , Anonymous?? lol i could make up wordplay that go's over everyone's head on this site lol .. Urr Crazyy
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Re: Lyrical Slaughter

Postby MC Anonymous » Apr 8th, '09, 23:39

J roc wrote:Ohh haha i skimmed the second one .... What u mean i don't understand wordplay , Anonymous?? lol i could make up wordplay that go's over everyone's head on this site lol .. Urr Crazyy

I said you need to get what the line says before criticizing it. Not that you don't understand wordplay itself. :y:
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Re: Lyrical Slaughter

Postby J Roc » Apr 9th, '09, 00:41

MC Anonymous wrote:
J roc wrote:Ohh haha i skimmed the second one .... What u mean i don't understand wordplay , Anonymous?? lol i could make up wordplay that go's over everyone's head on this site lol .. Urr Crazyy

I said you need to get what the line says before criticizing it. Not that you don't understand wordplay itself. :y:


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Re: Lyrical Slaughter

Postby gutawafang » Apr 21st, '09, 09:34

I think this drop is cool. I liked the lines you used. Most are original. It's cool. :y:
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