An old track I wrote

[mcZu]

This was supposed to be my first single if I ever were to release a mixtape; however, I might consider re-writing this piece. So any feedback is appreciated, especially constructive feed.

One life, one love and one king

One life and that’s mine, no one can underline
The degree that comes with my mind
So I do tend to rhyme in a way that strives
To live on so don’t mind me at all
Just let me be like the insect with pollen see
Myself, I know I put myself upon a shelf
Categorized with my life, no lies no fake truth
Rationalized, no five nine but this is a part of me
That I leave behind in the booth
I feel socialized with the mike like Hi This Is Zu
Aiming for the pressure points like kung Fu
Coming with a strategy like I was Sun Tzu
Homing like a missile locked on my target
Phtotoshoped the fake picture, I’m a real artist
Emcee’s paying the price ‘cause hip-hop aint fine
But it’s steadily coming back to one life

[One life, one love, so there could only be one king 2x]

One love, and it’s her, my head be above
Walking through the clouds ciphering with the doves
One love, but her can be two things, yeah enough
Suitable for music and my heart, soul filling up the hiatus
So why do I state this? ‘cause it’s my current status
Seeing sounds, no nerd but I feel her eye sight
Next to me each day, when she calls and my ringtone
Starts to play, you can clearly hear the sound of her
I feel completed when her voice overwhelms the noise
Focused and seated next to the joy out here voice box
I get a Kiss like the lox from her musical lips, such
A smooth vibe when she be on my mind, thus
We dance ‘till the moon stops reflecting the sun
A chance to save this moment without asking much
A dude with a high hat asked me: ‘what’s up?’
She turned the music up in my room and I said: ‘Meet my one love.’

[One life, one love, so there could only be one king 2x]

One king, no bling, that fly shit is not for me
‘cause it flew out of me when I saw the throne
People around me talking highness like they were stoned
Sightless tower around the handless hours upon a watch
Vibe less chess pieces waiting to be touched
The one love next to me, she the queen
My one life is protected by pawns in-between
A rook and a bishop, feeling all hip-hop
Setting records like the opposite of record sales from shops
Being on-top before I even dropped, so I didn’t fell off
‘cause I didn’t even step up, but I will seat myself on the throne
Pause the scene like a judge does in a court, hip-hop is my home
So I go fort and stay fort, minor not, major on the spot
Rising tied like flow, my castle, my show, speech like dot
I am the beginning and the end, the Z never be folding
You know there is one life, one love so there could only be one king.

[neversnooze]

it was pretty good, the flow was there and the meaning was there. nothing bad to say.in my opinion the first verse with kkung fu and zu was pretty cool.8/10

if i was you id record this piece