NEW SOLACE - The Truth [Finished]

[Solace]

Goes to the beat Winter Solace by Sinima.

[Intro]
This is the truth...Listen.

[Verse]
I know I ain't lyrical, ain't a miracle writer,
Never claimed prodigy, yet I fear I'll go lighter,
I feel just like dirt, I'll diminish in the sky,
Ripped apart, bitter I'll just be finished in demise,
And in my mind my world is cold, moving slow,
Improving? No. Cruising woes, lately I've been losing hope,
Removing those who've always cared the most for me,
Removing those who've always been so close to me,
I need to end this now, god please send me out,
When in doubt I tend to shout, covered in an endless cloud,
Hoping for subtle lease from this land of hatred,
I seem to cease being glad in this land, I hate it,
Leave in peace, be released from this land I'm placed in,
I need no grief, I'm mad, I'm sad man I'm pacing,
Lord please, I have cracked, the impact I'm bracing,
I seem to preach against this rope and this gat I'm facing.

[Hook]
I can't hold on much longer, I've cried so many times,
I used to be much stronger, regret my many lies,
I'm blinded...My entire vision is hazy,
The little can phase me, the world is driving me crazy,

[Requiem]

lol, i didn't like the chorus too much just didn't have a obvious flow to me.

verse was really good, great multies, and the "moving slow...losing hope" was a great emotion.

overall i liked it 7/10, not ur best drop. but it was defnly worth checking


also, looking back at the "when in doubt, i bend and shout" can be taken kind of awkwardly

[Solace]

lol, i didn't like the chorus too much just didn't have a obvious flow to me.

verse was really good, great multies, and the "moving slow...losing hope" was a great emotion.

overall i liked it 7/10, not ur best drop. but it was defnly worth checking


also, looking back at the "when in doubt, i bend and shout" can be taken kind of awkwardly

So you're saying if the chorus was better then it would have been 8 or so? Thanks that you liked the verse. The chorus is more sung so it doesn't really have a flow thats rapped. Thanks for checkin. Lmfao @ the awkward line

[SajN]

You have improved a lot


Nice flow, great content. That's something I like and kinda can relate to.
Nice multies!


Keep it up

[Arabian Shady]

that was dope man, wiked flow, nice use of multies and the structure made it look effortless
definatley the only thing worth chekin out on the entire page
Peace

[Solace]

^Wow thanks dudes. I'm guessing some brown pride in here

Glad you guys liked it

[SajN]

^Wow thanks dudes. I'm guessing some brown pride in here

Wtf?

[Solace]

^Wow thanks dudes. I'm guessing some brown pride in here

Wtf?

Well you, being Paki, him being Arab, me being Paki too.

I sense brown pride you dig


Anyways I've finished it. Added more lines and revised others and fixed that little homo line of mine.

[Solace]

I thought it was good, not your best but good content and easy flow and no lack of rhyming, 7/10

Thanks dude

[brutus09shady]

not to sound stpid but whats a mulitie*

[Solace]

Lmfao a *multi* is a short for multi-syllable rhyming. There for each syllable rhymes. For example,

Lack-ing and stack-ing. Stack and Lack are 1 syllable and they both rhyme. Ing and Ing are 1 syllable and they are both the same. It's a multi. I'm like your motherfuckin' teacher lmfao.

But yeah Brutus what'd you think of my piece?

[brutus09shady]

aw damn im stupid as fuck lol

but damn kid you did the damn thing

[Solace]

Thanks

[BILI]

Good stuff homie.Keep it up.

[SajN]

^Wow thanks dudes. I'm guessing some brown pride in here

Wtf?

Well you, being Paki, him being Arab, me being Paki too.

I sense brown pride you dig


Anyways I've finished it. Added more lines and revised others and fixed that little homo line of mine.

Rofl. Yeah, brown pride all the day (kinda)


I don't remember your last lines, so I dont see what's changed or added
But it's still good