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Postby Ka0t1c » May 26th, '09, 20:25

How come i'm always going thru these tough times
well, what kind of help could i find before i'm done tryin

i'm tongue tied but i'm the one cryin, do i belong blind
cuz it seems everything my eyes see is wrong, why?

now i just need and want signs to proceed
that keeps me alive on my long drive

survival is key and i am worried, i'll try to hurry
cuz it's vital to reach beyond binds i believe

or i'm fighting to breathe cuz i'm kinda getting deep
down in a spiral to re-sign from being freed

a ride which will lead me off my climb i've been seeking
have i lost my mind, it sounds like my body is sinking

a pyschological mudslide, my revival might be shrinking
to a small size, meaning it's harder achieving

i'm falling farther, i'm freaking
so i call out for the father to keep me onsides...
Last edited by Ka0t1c on May 26th, '09, 22:44, edited 1 time in total.
oh yeah... and thanks for nothing too
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Re: Onsides

Postby classthe_king » May 26th, '09, 21:26

dang thats actually pretty good. Very hearfelt, it was just kind of hard to read at times but :y:
You think your personal attacks make up for what you lack?
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Re: Onsides

Postby Slim Zaddy » May 28th, '09, 12:40

i could relate to this bro ,, nice shit i liked it ,, keep it up
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Re: Onsides

Postby Ka0t1c » May 28th, '09, 15:44

thanx for your feedback!
oh yeah... and thanks for nothing too
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