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My Crazy

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My Crazy

Postby Ka0t1c » May 30th, '09, 00:16

you'll try to pull me apart from my art, my heart and soul
but i am so smart that i already know
so how far would you go to target me though until i'm outta control?
i doubt you'd wanna show yourself around now that you stole
all what helped to build me whole
hell is about to amount up, your toll
for drownin my only outlet that sparks my bulb
cuz like a water fountain i flow
from the faucet at home, they found ya alone
under a thousand gallons with your body engulfed
by electrical volts, sounds like someone was naughty
your potty mouth, i washed it with soap
and put your hollers to a halt
i left you bounded by rope...
the fault is your own
you brought this upon no one else
should you suffer real slow
or must i slaughter you for the low blows
do i even bother, oh well, holy cow, i hear alarms
leavin the tone of bells in my ears, i'm gone...
oh yeah... and thanks for nothing too
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Re: My Crazy

Postby Slim Zaddy » May 30th, '09, 11:19

i liked the emotion here ,, but it's not your best at all ,, it's just a normal piece ,, you have dont a lot better ,, but still it's good :y:
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z_em = Slim Zaddy = Zaid AQ which is my real name
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Re: My Crazy

Postby Ka0t1c » May 30th, '09, 15:42

alright, thanx for feedin
oh yeah... and thanks for nothing too
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Re: My Crazy

Postby Fa-Q » May 30th, '09, 17:09

yea that was good like zaddy said not your best...I like more inside and multis
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