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Re: Verse for a mixtape

Postby mcZu » Jun 5th, '09, 14:38

I like it, flow seems flawless and the lyrics seem dope. Nice job.
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Re: Verse for a mixtape

Postby Ka0t1c » Jun 5th, '09, 22:55

very cool, nice lyrics :y: :y:
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Re: Verse for a mixtape

Postby JMG » Jun 5th, '09, 23:19

the sung part was alright, the rappin part was flawless tho flowed perfect.
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Re: Verse for a mixtape

Postby Fa-Q » Jun 6th, '09, 03:35

damn man that was sick but not very long...i guess it is a mixtape verse...good multis man...(swagger jacking in progress) just kidding man keep it up
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Re: Verse for a mixtape

Postby Robbie G » Jun 6th, '09, 13:20

I liked the first four lines the best, flow was flawless. :y:
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Re: Verse for a mixtape

Postby Solace » Jun 6th, '09, 17:51

Very dope Maybe.
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Re: Verse for a mixtape

Postby Slim Zaddy » Jun 8th, '09, 09:48

lol ,, you have sick lines ,, i liked this one
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nice lyris and vipe , keep it up bro :y:
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Re: Verse for a mixtape

Postby lilrossy » Jun 8th, '09, 10:43

Shady Babie wrote:I liked the first four lines the best, flow was flawless. :y:

yeah i agree, dat shit was crazy. on a whole, i really liked it, keep it up man. :y:
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Re: Verse for a mixtape

Postby James R. » Jun 8th, '09, 14:34

Man that shit was hotter than a volcanic bowel movement. Keep it up homie!
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Re: Verse for a mixtape

Postby Steve Spag » Jun 8th, '09, 17:02

You showed me this the other day and I came in my pants. I think I just came again. The little intro is sick man, and you know I can relate to it, haha. Deffinetly can't wait to hear this shit recorded dude!
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