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warnin

Postby Ka0t1c » Jun 7th, '09, 03:16

boy, i'm warnin you my soldiers are stormin thru
destroyin your soil for disorder until we corner you
the story's true, i'm kevin mccoy and i enjoy turmoil
to those disloyal, who chose to choose the choice
to hoist their voice so my boiling point debuts
you dissappoint me but i'll rejoice when you join your crew
you can't avoid what's due, i'll exploit it too
you're a spoiled jew, that toys with who
deploys, oil's in our toilet: you (afghanistan)
in this world, war's been more than two
oh yeah... and thanks for nothing too
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Re: warnin

Postby Dr.Lecter » Jun 7th, '09, 09:00

what is this about?
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Re: warnin

Postby Ka0t1c » Jun 7th, '09, 18:43

it's about the US going to Afghanistan aka "Trash-can-istan" pretty much
oh yeah... and thanks for nothing too
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Re: warnin

Postby neversnooze » Jun 8th, '09, 04:54

the rhyming is on point and so is multies. its fairly short to say anything more. i enjoyed it.

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Re: warnin

Postby James R. » Jun 8th, '09, 14:31

I liked the topic, I liked the emotion in the bars, I enjoyed the rhyming, I enjoyed the flow. Overall good piece man. I wish it was a little longer though. 8/10
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