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**READ** DOPE ASS FUCKIN LYRICS!!!!!!!********

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**READ** DOPE ASS FUCKIN LYRICS!!!!!!!********

Postby remd12 » Jun 7th, '09, 06:21

I'm a brainiac when I say these raps
I slay these tracks with 80 gats I waste these cats
Just wait, relax, an insane attack with a baseball bat
I react with rage when I rock the stage
Like Rage against the machine, you know what I mean, you drama queen, act your age
It's time to blaze the finest haze
Watch me amaze, your confused and dazed
while your stuck and lost in a maze
I slay these gays burnin through skin like ultraviolet rays
I got no name, I'm inhumane, I play games with invisible flames
And suck you up, I'm an alien when I invade
I'm hot like lava, stop the drama, You do not wanna
Be fighting me, when I'm striking thee, quick like lighting
I'm like Mike Tyson when I'm fighting knocking you out with my right hand
I demand respect, Don't disrespect, I'll break ya neck till theres nothing left
Occuring next is a grand theft - auto straight to the bank to cash the check
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Re: **READ** DOPE ASS FUCKIN LYRICS!!!!!!!********

Postby Slovinec » Jun 7th, '09, 06:37

Everybody is copying Em now, ever since he started doing that insane multi shit, people are trying to copy him
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Postby J Roc » Jun 7th, '09, 08:00

BizarreKId wrote:Everybody is copying Em now, ever since he started doing that insane multi shit, people are trying to copy him


u noticed too? haha .... Dude's gotta get their own swagger .

and the piece was decent
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Postby Solace » Jun 7th, '09, 16:40

It wasn't even that good.
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Postby lilrossy » Jun 8th, '09, 10:50

^^^wasn't even that good.^^^ shit i thought it was pretty good man, keep it up :y:
"Too fatal, unable to crash
Sluts I introduce to anal call me a pain in the ass"
"Got hoes suspicious. Even one peg leg bitches
After I came, fucked em with they own leg
They ain't know the difference"
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Postby James R. » Jun 8th, '09, 14:30

If the multies weren't in there it would have been completely forgettable, and since it sounds like you listened to Infinite and some of the more complex Relapse tracks it's still forgettable because your influences are too obvious.

Everyone is influenced by a lot of different things and people, and that's totally fine, but you can't make it so obvious. My advice for you would be to listen to a LOT more artists. I mean I have a heavy Jay-Z influence, but I'm influenced enough by other rappers like Nas, Em, and Snoop that it doesn't sound like I'm imitating any of them. Make sure you look for oppposing styles. If you're listening to stuff that's heavy with multies then listen to some simple, but deep shit. Listen to smtn that's ALL about flow. Being good is about more than just rhyming a lot (i.e. Cam'ron and the Diplomats) so expand your influences.

Better than that though don't listen to any music for a couple days, throw on some beats, and try to write something so you can really see what YOUR style is. While influence is important and inevitable being yourself is required.
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Postby Solace » Jun 8th, '09, 21:07

lilrossy wrote:^^^wasn't even that good.^^^ shit i thought it was pretty good man, keep it up :y:

Okay, I being being too hard on this. It was decent imo, but its not DOPE ASS FUCKING LYRICS!!!!!!
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