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World Today (N.E.W)

Postby Slim Zaddy » Jun 10th, '09, 21:04

If You're Dealt A Bad Hand, Flip The Cards Over..
'N' If You Run Out Of Luck, Throw Out The Clover..
When Life Has You Down, Then Just Give Up And Die..
Or Just Sit There Denied, As The World Passes By..
Glass, Half Full Or Half Empty.. Who Really Cares..
.Noone Listens.. So Still Make Unanswered Prayers..
You Fall To Your Knees, And Cry Over Spilt Milk..
Yet Couldn't Care Less, When Soldiers Were Killed..
Current Events, Is What Keep This World Spinning..
When Will It End.. Or Flip Back To The Beginning..
People Are Scammed And Robbed, Then Left Alone..
Praise Given To Those, Who Cast The First Stone..
Even When Some Try To Help, All We See Is A Nuisance..
'N' The World Hangs In Balance,...As the Noose Loosens..
People Will Lie To Your Face, Then Grin Ear To Ear..
Then Shake Your Hand, And Swear They're Sincere..
For You Will Feel, The Blade Penetrate Your Spine..
Mans Word Has Become Useless, I Barely Trust Mine..
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Re: World Today (N.E.W)

Postby neversnooze » Jun 11th, '09, 01:59

bravo Z :worship: this whole thing "word for word" the rhyming and multies were perfect. the delivery(meaning) was also on point. when i was reading this it felt like i was reading two sides to a story.+

great write bro your skills have improved since the first you came to this site :smoking:
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Re: World Today (N.E.W)

Postby lilrossy » Jun 11th, '09, 08:03

^^ i agree man, this is a mad verse u got here. the rhyming was well structured nd it had a good meaning to it, u were spitin the truth, jus real talk, nd the result was solid. great work man, keep it up. :y:
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Re: World Today (N.E.W)

Postby DOPE » Jun 11th, '09, 10:56

this is fucking sick.

loved it.
"It's amazing that the amount of news that happens in the world every day always just exactly fits the newspaper."

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Make you satanistic
Make you take the pistol to your face
N place the clip N cock it back
N let it go until your brains are rippin out your skull so bad
To sew you back would be a waste of stitches

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Re: World Today (N.E.W)

Postby Slim Zaddy » Jun 12th, '09, 12:08

neversnooze wrote:bravo Z :worship: this whole thing "word for word" the rhyming and multies were perfect. the delivery(meaning) was also on point. when i was reading this it felt like i was reading two sides to a story.+

great write bro your skills have improved since the first you came to this site :smoking:



thanks neversnooze , it mean a lot from ya man ,, glad you enjoyed it

lilrossy wrote:^^ i agree man, this is a mad verse u got here. the rhyming was well structured nd it had a good meaning to it, u were spitin the truth, jus real talk, nd the result was solid. great work man, keep it up. :y:


thanks lilrossy , much appreciated bro :worship:

DOPE wrote:this is fucking sick.

loved it.


fucking loved the comment :flower: , thanks dope , glad you liked it bro
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Re: World Today (N.E.W)

Postby James R. » Jun 12th, '09, 13:54

Tight as fuck. Seriously.
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Re: World Today (N.E.W)

Postby Slim Zaddy » Jun 13th, '09, 14:54

James R. wrote:Tight as fuck. Seriously.



thanks James ,, glad you liked it bro . :worship:
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Re: World Today (N.E.W)

Postby Solace » Jun 13th, '09, 16:16

That was...Great.

Really dude :y:
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Re: World Today (N.E.W)

Postby Drama Setter » Jun 13th, '09, 17:14

Sick man , I like It honestly :y:
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Re: World Today (N.E.W)

Postby Ka0t1c » Jun 13th, '09, 20:58

hahaha, wow, it has some good points, it's not bad :y:
oh yeah... and thanks for nothing too
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Re: World Today (N.E.W)

Postby Noeezy » Jun 14th, '09, 12:07

dope flow and concept
think my fav lines were the last 4 but overall it was a nice verse
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Re: World Today (N.E.W)

Postby gutawafang » Jun 14th, '09, 12:10

Very poetic. And I understand the good structure man. :y: Good one bro.
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Re: World Today (N.E.W)

Postby Slim Zaddy » Jun 14th, '09, 13:36

^^^^wow ,, i really appreciate that guys ,, glad you liked it , thanks for you all , much respect :worship:
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Re: World Today (N.E.W)

Postby Ice_Scarred » Jun 15th, '09, 02:52

Wow, this is some good stuff. I like your rhyme scheme, but even more than that I like the subject matter and the content. Really good piece man!

Keep em' comin! :y:
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Re: World Today (N.E.W)

Postby Slim Zaddy » Jun 16th, '09, 10:05

Ice_Scarred wrote:Wow, this is some good stuff. I like your rhyme scheme, but even more than that I like the subject matter and the content. Really good piece man!

Keep em' comin! :y:



thanks bro ,, happy you liked it my friend ,, :y:
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