frame by frame

[Ka0t1c]

on this forum, my famous name is known for postin
cuz i explain my soul worth showin like a portrait frame by frame

well, i'm a soldier goin forward, nobody can say it's over
until my orbit's outta order cuz i still sorta remain the same

i will not fall off course and then forfeit what's no doubt important
cuz i'm proud i came towards this or i'd prolly be poured right down the drain

i found my reward, it's performin with strength as a valuable warrior
and now i am cornered in the realm of insane, the howlin of horror, oh lord the drama remains


but i shall not abort this, i'm bout to reboard the plane towards a war which
is shorter but afterwards, they close the door, it's hard to maintain

cuz i'm caught pourin out my pores gallons of rain like i'm drownin by water
cuz my world's full of all pain, one part of my story bounded with shame...

[lilrossy]

this is an all right piece man, i liked the whole rhyme scheme u got goin on dare, it was a good read. nice work

[Ka0t1c]

thanx for your input!

[Slim Zaddy]

i liked it , you got some good lines ,, not your best at all , you write much more better ,, but it was a good drop , i enjoyed it

[Ka0t1c]

well, everything i write is testing out dif. styles and aspects so i consider them and try to build upon that for next time. thanx

[Steve Spag]

It's alright, but deffinetly not one of your best. I see what you were trying to do, rhyme-scheme wise, but I felt that some lines were much longer than necessary, and it kinda fucked up the flow when I was reading it. Below your standards for sure, but still a nice piece.

Keep it up man, you're a talented dude!

[James R.]

It's alright, but deffinetly not one of your best. I see what you were trying to do, rhyme-scheme wise, but I felt that some lines were much longer than necessary, and it kinda fucked up the flow when I was reading it. Below your standards for sure, but still a nice piece.

Keep it up man, you're a talented dude!

Pretty much feel the same way about it.

[Ka0t1c]

thanx James & Steve for checking this out and adding your input on this