Standin with You [needs chorus]

[James R.]

So this is my first topical since I've been able to write again. Just smtn with a personal vibe. Not really about anything that's happened to me. There will be a chorus but I just couldn't think of one and wanted to post this up. I'm still workin out the kinks, but enjoy.

We were young when it started and departed the nest
I couldn’t act out how I felt so I hardened my chest
I pardoned my breath every time you walked in a room
Blinded at first cuz you were like my star in the gloom
The approach was too easy conversation so smooth
Went from summers on the beach to holidays in snow shoes
All abrasive, no fool would drop his game shit on you
Not the same to most dudes all my frames were on you
I knew you needed me and you responded to the ego
Had so much in common, we were drawn to different things though
I needed money and fame you needed passion and life
I thought we could have it all if were planning it right
But you called me on my septic, a skeptic and nexted it
You didn’t want all of that extra shit
And I loved your point of view cuz you never sugar coated it
Perfect for each other anybody woulda noticed it

[chorus]

My brain couldn’t handle all the stress of the game
But you held me kept me a little less than insane
A blessing it’s strange that I could be so fortunate
Of course you get everything I got never portion it
The music and the business gettin deeper though
And deeper holes put our relationship in a sleeper hold
I didn’t see you roll callin like 3 year old
You wouldn’t answer me, so you had one of you people call
They told me you were leavin though and even though
I said I need to know they wouldn’t just give up your regional
And it was over that fast when I heard the door creek
Got up off the floor to speak but you were ignorin me
Then you looked and you yelled “YOU AINT YOU SUPPOSED TO BE!
YOU WON’T EVER BE HERE HOLDIN ME!
I DON’T KNOW WHAT TO DO NOW YOU’LL NEVER MAKE A HOME FOR ME!”
And that’s the first time she ever really spoke to me

[chorus]

I showed up at your crib in the middle of the night
Just got in another fight about my livin of my life
And I knew I wasn’t right I had my head in the clouds
And I was scared cuz you always mentioned settlin down
I had dreams I could chase and some cheese I could make
And some cream I could taste all of these were mistakes
I took for granted what I was handed and landed on a planet
Damaged havoc had ravaged all of my plannin’
And I still saw you standin with your arms open heart broken
Soft spoken words rippin right through all my hard cloaks and
My sternum burnin as I’m learnin that I’m hurtin
The only person that held me down right through the closed curtain
I felt, so dismantled I couldn’t handle the truth
The life I always wanted I couldn’t have it with you
So I had to make a choice but what’s a man gonna do?
I had to ask myself the question my only answer is you

[chorus]

[Spyder]

WOW DUDE
kay man first it seemed so fuckin heartfelt, like i was in a depressed mindstate and then i came upon this and i dont think i would have rather read anything else at this moment in time.
the flow was untouchable and the multies were out of this world. idk if its just because im feeling like this piece but i think this is miles beyond your recent stuff, and im dam sure glad i read that.

i hope you can bring that kind of calibur to the next collab, which is why i was in that minset because i wrote my verse

[J Roc]

That was illlll James haha .... Easily in my top 3 on the site for songs , probably even the best lol . i'm trying to get into songs more and out of the Punchlines shittt lately , cause im getting a mic soon lol . Props

[Ka0t1c]

thats dope james 92/100

[DOPE]

thats doap shit James. i was kinda relating to that so i really liked it.

you should record this song over a sick beat, id download it.

[Noeezy]

nice drop man, fuckin pacific ocean flow right there
should be ghostwriting for Em lol keep it up

[gutawafang]

Beautiful even without chorus. Period.

[James R.]

Whoa thanks for all the replies people. Glad everyone's enjoying it.

Thanks guta, I wouldn't do a chorus but then I'd have 3 songs with no hook and that would get boring haha

[James R.]

Last bump for feed!

[classthe_king]

Whoa thanks for all the replies people. Glad everyone's enjoying it.

Thanks guta, I wouldn't do a chorus but then I'd have 3 songs with no hook and that would get boring haha

Haha, just saw this
This is very good, i can actually feel the song, if that makes any sense. It seems real and vivd. Very good

[James R.]

Thanks for checkin man and I know exactly what you mean.

[Fa-Q]

dope

[James R.]

dope

Word

[SajN]

Do I need to say:

HOLY COCK! THAT PIECE WAS AWESOME MAN! THE MULTIES THE FLOW , EVERYTHING!!! DOPE

[James R.]

Lmfao I dunno about the "HOLY COCK" part, but the rest of it was pretty much what I was hoping to get from people hahaha. Thanks for readin it man.