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Frozen Thoughts; Swollen Heart.

Postby MC Anonymous » Jun 17th, '09, 00:06

Single for my album. Different then most rap out there so give me a break on it. It's supposed to stimulate your imagination for pictures and also make it so you think about it. That's why I named it after my album. This is what I am about; although my recent stuff hasn't been like this. Hope you like it.

With a million MC's on the seat of redemtion
suspention inside the air got me to question
If these mentions intertwined in dimension
will dectection of my life be agression?
forced to stop and think, be complete
see, with me, Identity needs to be
one I hold dear to me, this fear is free
leaving spirits pleased, appeased the demon in me
walk across a blackened sky, the ground is blue
every footstep a cloud, but it's drowning you
My tears flows as the movement of my blood to my feet
seeing the bloodstained bolts damage trees with the heat
fire is flames of pain, insane brains as grains
refine them long enough they turn to glass and fade away
I sometimes imagine, imagination imagining images
but the imagery im seeing is blank humanity's image
Every beginning has an end as death has a life
flip it around, a cycle of thought cuts like a knife
That's what life is about, problems and circular thinking
Racism is 10 percent and the rest is the speaking
Taking pics of ethiopeans instead of feeding them
rejecting God as a person but come when you needing him
hypocracy dishonesty honestly bother me heavily
ready for alien contact but not AIDS medicine entity
Priority prior to ity seeing the C in comform
We can't do anything that is outside the fucking norm
Humans have no right to call each other snakes
cause Cold Blooded are warmer then all the lives we take
I'm sick of it, sick of being sick of a two letter word
Sick of sickness, sick of life and sick of a verse.
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Re: Frozen Thoughts; Swollen Heart.

Postby Emadyville » Jun 17th, '09, 02:06

Your uniqueness on this made it dope, content made it that much better tho :y:
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Re: Frozen Thoughts; Swollen Heart.

Postby gutawafang » Jun 17th, '09, 02:36

The title is damn cool and it suits the lyrics.

"rejecting God as a person but come when you needing him"
That's quite a hook.

"walk across a blackened sky, the ground is blue
every footstep a cloud, but it's drowning you"
Hard to picture that. I bet it's beautiful if a video is made.

"death has a life"
This is perfect.

Wordplay is maximum. :y:
Multis are right on the spot.
Metaphors and all the punchlines are simply there to captivate the readers.

I wanted to read more actually. Probably a verse 2? :happy:

It's so damn cool. :y:
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Re: Frozen Thoughts; Swollen Heart.

Postby MC Anonymous » Jun 17th, '09, 18:26

Thanks homies. More feed please? :flower:
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Re: Frozen Thoughts; Swollen Heart.

Postby classthe_king » Jun 17th, '09, 18:58

Dang man, nice job, crazy lyrics and crazy rhymes. You should make more of that.
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Re: Frozen Thoughts; Swollen Heart.

Postby Tomega » Jun 17th, '09, 20:12

ah thats cool man.
I like it. Feel the same way about things you say.
"Taking pics of ethiopeans instead of feeding them"

and this is sick:
"I sometimes imagine, imagination imagining images
but the imagery im seeing is blank humanity's image"

and how did you come up with this:
Humans have no right to call each other snakes
cause Cold Blooded are warmer then all the lives we take

haha i really like it! good job
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Re: Frozen Thoughts; Swollen Heart.

Postby Solace » Jun 17th, '09, 23:53

Just a great piece as I've told you before Angel. I really enjoyed it, and it's uniqueness. Can't wait to hear it man.
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Re: Frozen Thoughts; Swollen Heart.

Postby MC Anonymous » Jun 18th, '09, 03:44

Solace wrote:Just a great piece as I've told you before Angel. I really enjoyed it, and it's uniqueness. Can't wait to hear it man.

Thanks bro.
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Re: Frozen Thoughts; Swollen Heart.

Postby MC Anonymous » Jun 20th, '09, 15:01

Coleon wrote:damn good shit man, love it, abstract stuff is always so deep

:y:

Thanks homie. :y:
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Re: Frozen Thoughts; Swollen Heart.

Postby MC Anonymous » Jun 21st, '09, 14:28

Please more feed?
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Re: Frozen Thoughts; Swollen Heart.

Postby tjb » Jun 21st, '09, 15:03

urright it is different but its real dope nice work
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