i typed this up fast

[Ka0t1c]

instead of a bible to carry, i'll have a dictionary
and i am fightin my rivals like a mercenary
cuz in life, it's survival of the fittest
i won't stay stationary
so until my time's at it's finish line
when my fate is buried, i'll skate this fairway
cuz why rewind, it's my design which i've assigned
and i don't mind, you can hate me very
but if you aint bewaring, it may get scary
for what you're saying, i'll break you airway
when your hind i find, i don't care, be praying
or i'll make your spine unbind and scrape your brains
and rape you , i swear or slay you, i'll take your berries
you fake ass cherry, i'm satan, mary save you
cuz i've quite frank, lost all bearing,
at point blank, the barell's staring, there aint no aiming
that's it, start waving, your exit's here waiting ...
no resurrection, just one direction and that's not to heaven's stairway...

[gutawafang]

The structure is weird and I can't flow to it man. But I can see that you use quite a variety of vocabulary and you're using multies.

But the way I interpret it, it's not a rap. It sounds like a poem. The structure is somehow poetic and if you add in the correct punctuations, it'd be a dope one.

[Ka0t1c]

it works good, i rap it faster than how u read it

[gutawafang]

Okay, I tried to turn a beat on. And yeah you quite right man. It has to be rapped faster than i usually do. Thanks for reminding me man.

[Ka0t1c]

cool to hear, but yeah.. structure wise, it is weird

[Just Silver]

instead of a bible to carry, i'll have a dictionary
and i am fightin my rivals like a mercenary
cuz in life, it's survival of the fittest
i won't stay stationary
so until my time's at it's finish line
when my fate is buried, i'll skate this fairway
cuz why rewind, it's my design which i've assigned
and i don't mind, you can hate me very
but if you aint bewaring, it may get scary
for what you're saying, i'll break you airway
when your hind i find, i don't care, be praying
or i'll make your spine unbind and scrape your brains
and rape you , i swear or slay you, i'll take your berries
you fake ass cherry, i'm satan, mary save you
cuz i've quite frank, lost all bearing,
at point blank, the barell's staring, there aint no aiming
that's it, start waving, your exit's here waiting ...
no resurrectionn, just one direction and that's not to heaven's stairway...

Lovin the words used and i think vocab is one of the most important parts of rap but is even more important thats how u can tell u didnt take ur time... good job still tho