BLOWIN OFF STEAM!

[shadyallday]

this is called blowin off steam id appreciate some feedback...

lets just cut to the chase/ why r all these motherfuckers up in my face?/ sometimes it feels like i'm runnin in place/ i just need someone to hug or embrace/ or just somebody to talk to, so they can make me feel better when i'm feelin awful/ my life is like a tunnel, and its just too small to crawl through/ its like i'm talking to the wall, because its hard to argue/ if u only felt a morsel of pain i fought through/ it was like tryin to breathe under water without a snorkel/ or a horse tryin to walk with no horseshoes/ im slowin down to a halt, like a porsche with no more fuel/ and thats only maybe a fourth of all the bullshit ive gone through/

im just blowin off steam/ im more peaceful when i ventilate, then when i meditate/ sometimes i just wanna scream/ when im in that mental state, it feels like im in a better place/ i love it when its so quiet and serene/ that way i can just be me, and blow off some steam/

it feels like im walking on egg shells/ all i hear is "u know that he meant well," but u know what, i cant tell/ it feels likeim all alone in a crammed cell/ i just wanna punch the wall, until my hands swell/ or i can take a handful of advil/ and jump out the window tied to an anvil/ or take a knife to my adam's apple/ my life feels like its in shambles/ damn im dealin with more crap than i can handle/ it feels like i cant breathe, im getting strangled/ my esophagus is about the size of an ant hill/ my talent is getting wasted like all the crap in a landfill/ my minds at a stand still, there comes a time when people will test a mans will/ or test a mans skill and keep pushin him until that mans killed/ u could do anything but u cant tempt me/ u see the glass half full, i see it as half empty/ when u cross that line ur going passed friendly/ now ur actin like u accidentally, told a crack that in fact offended me/ but it was wack, not exemplary, u know my raps r a little past legendary/ ill still be spittin rhymes till im buried in the cemetary/

yo im fed up, maybe i should just overdose/ it feels like im comatose/ everything seems like its goin slow/ i dont know where im going, but i know its close/ i dont got a motive so, if this rap shit doesnt work i know im broke/ im tired of hearin all the told u so's and all the no u wont's/ maybe i should just go to church and catch the holy ghost/ i always think the worst maybe more than most/ i always get the short end of the stick/ i guess im more of a pessimist/ im the one that'll probably go talk sports with a therapist/ and he'll probably prescribe meall sorts of seditives/ i have a hard time describing all this prejudice/ i dont really care what u think of me/ this was my chance to blow off a little steam!/

[Steve Spag]

Havn't seen you post on here much, but this piece (aside from the structre you typed it in) is absoutely amazing. The wordplay is great, and the emotion is incredible, really deep stuff. Actually reminded me of myself last year. You had a really nice flow on it, and your end multi's were very nice and smooth. All in all, an awesome piece!

Keep it coming!

[Chasingtimeagain]

I like it a lot. The way I'm reading the rhymes in my head sound very Eminem-ish (I don't know if that's what you're going for).

Good shit.