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They told me i fell off

Postby J Roc » Jun 28th, '09, 23:57

*Ladies & Gentlemen!!!!! Take a Seat... because the CAST IS TARDY..No wait the RAP IS STARTED*
ya Bars-Stink!! i got that shit that'll "Stop-ink" like the CAP ON SHARPIES!!!
Act-Brave i'll see u BackStage... but not the AFTER PARTY!!!!
Nope!!! whut im saying goes past this FORUM STUFF so suck my 'BallSAC' or just HOLD THE NUTS
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..... :staticsmoking: .... no wait ur going to light J!!! and u still on that caplock shit .... Knock it off!!

*Rolls mah eyes*

Fine Man!! Don't blame me if they think we playing football & they want every 'Line back'
(Ur New Styles Wack) Just try-it if u think i'm "spineless" ... how can i be when Im "Back"???
That's a Good Point J Fuck what THESE LAMES THINK , Switch your style up? That's DEGRADING!!
The Bar's-that-u-text is like "Car's-on-the-net" how your always "E-RACING"!! (Erasing)
This GOES TO THE LOVE BIRDS: ur private partys consist of faggots that GO WITH EACH OTHER!!
in No-Suit's , for you faggot's there'll be "No-Room" Like i'm CLOSING THE SHUTTERS!!!
& J's-Nikka's Get's "Hate-Quicker" Then Anonymous VOTING ON STRUCTURE!!![I saw that!! lol]
i give PROPS TO THE WORLD cuz i'm happy , only thing i LOST WAS MY CHURCH CLOTHES
i get proud-high so much That'll "Cloud-Nines" like i'm on TOP OF THE WORLD!!!
See-the-dirt? i "feel-like-Earth" ... ironically i guesss ya bitch is on "TOP OF THE WORLD"!!! Lol!!
& 1 lass thing
If you think my bar's ain't GOOD ENOUGH they got 1 thing to say to you ... (Don't LOOK AT US!!!!)


Lightwork / ... i'mma come harder next time lol .... :wave:
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Re: They told me i fell off

Postby James R. » Jun 29th, '09, 00:01

Now THAT was some tight shit. Good job bro.
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Re: They told me i fell off

Postby J Roc » Jun 29th, '09, 00:03

Thank's bro... when i was writing this i was like 'Now i gotta impress James R this time' ... hahaha
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Re: They told me i fell off

Postby mcZu » Jun 29th, '09, 00:05

Not bad, the structure annoys me though. But it had some nice bars.
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Re: They told me i fell off

Postby James R. » Jun 29th, '09, 00:16

J roc wrote:Thank's bro... when i was writing this i was like 'Now i gotta impress James R this time' ... hahaha

Hahaha with those multies and those punches you did exactly that homie. Good job.
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Re: They told me i fell off

Postby Steve Spag » Jun 29th, '09, 00:19

Damn, that was some majorly dope rap! Wordplay, as usual, was wicked. The flow was sick on this piece, and the punches were amazing. Probably one of the best drops I've seen from you man.

Good stuff!
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