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Re-Emerge(ncy)...(NEW FINALLY)

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Re-Emerge(ncy)...(NEW FINALLY)

Postby Spyder » Jul 8th, '09, 19:23

I’m back bitches

Ima scorch, torch your Porsche, throw it back on ya porch in portions
Sorcerer’s course, ridin' no remorse for forcin' whores to get abortions.
Shits unfortunate, I dictate the pace and obliterate races to phase kids
Makin up for mistakes made today cuz I ain’t sprayed great in ages.
A dazed nation is all I left behind, soon you’ll know never test my rhymes
Cuz I’m a blessed mind with clever lines to leave you bitches mesmerized.
These whack-shit raps are done, I have returned back-from madness
These new cats lack-some badness, they bout to get a slap of platinum status.
My demonic untaught methodical way will spray in ways unthought of
No hope for doctors, once you go into shock uh, nothin will stop ya.
Ever since Vicious Assault became a top-hit you bitches could never stop it,
NASA could build your mic and your whack ass still would never rock-it.

Hook(X2)
I got that ill flow and I’m back ready to rap
You took your shots at me, but left me intact
Clever words to sever in thirds, I’m steady at last
I got AK’s with gages and a machete in back.

Here to make a name, take aim at fakes who play this game
Things just ain’t the same, lyrics sprayed for sake of fame.
I’ve regained this flame, a floatin ghost to haunt ya, ima lyrical spirit
Have you in fear when you hear it, and in tears when it appears bitch.
5 Star Generals jumpstart my heart to sparks, got me thinkin’ again
Prisoned serial killer, murder weapon… the ink in this pen.
Cats can’t believe I still rap, in fact it’s really only the thrill that
Has me dismantlin tracks so bad, no map can show where my skills at.
This marks my return, I’m back to when my shit-rang-eerie
Rap bigger than James vs. Anon, code-name The Big Bang Theory.
My shit pierce ya like shredder swords, with metaphors to sever whores
Its always been better than yours, shit sold out before it was ever in stores.

Hook(X2)
I got that ill flow and I’m back ready to rap
You took your shots at me, but left me intact
Clever words to sever in thirds, I’m steady at last
I got AK’s with gages and a machete in back.


feedback appreciated, came out of writers block :D
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Re: Re-Emerge(ncy)...(NEW FINALLY)

Postby Ka0t1c » Jul 8th, '09, 20:27

i like it man! you did this pretty well, it seems tho you didn't put enough time into the second verse, still a good piece to post
oh yeah... and thanks for nothing too
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Re: Re-Emerge(ncy)...(NEW FINALLY)

Postby Fa-Q » Jul 8th, '09, 21:03

yea i think 1st verse is crazy...good flow but then the second verse is good just lacking idk it just didnt have the same fire...but i liked 1st verse and the hook was catchy WITHOUT a beat so....keep that in mind man
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Re: Re-Emerge(ncy)...(NEW FINALLY)

Postby mcZu » Jul 8th, '09, 22:01

Agree with every one above, first verse was better than the second. Though they are both dope bro, keep repping the Generals, lmfao. Keep up the good work :y:
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Re: Re-Emerge(ncy)...(NEW FINALLY)

Postby Spyder » Jul 8th, '09, 22:23

thanks for the feed guys I appreciate it :y:
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