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D.O.A

Postby mcZu » Jul 8th, '09, 21:53

Yes, I had to do it. Wrote some shit on the D.O.A instrumental.

See my words flow on beat like a Viking King
You’re in pain, I’m the killer – together we’re Vicoden
Autotune is played out like wordplay with Iverson
I jumble it up, ‘cause it’s ‘I-on-vers,’ son
So I vice versa the death of hip-hop with a vers, son
I’m on fire like the place you go to after a sin
So go spell -like a Ouija board in church while you sing
Your name on a tombstone with passion
Don’t forget to cross the across bridge passing
Lake of death while you aiming to dunk, son
I’m a survivor, you a liver from a drunk, son
Meaning the river is liquor, per scripted per script
Paralyzing the limbs per percentage shift
Perplexing the glass in the ceiling like a woman movement
Moving the feelings, so you can feel it moving
Sounds resemble a fetus, hungry, so a feast is suiting
Like stepping in a three piece suite
Stop talking ‘bout palming trees and carrying a piece
The day I’ll lose, will be the day of achieving peace
Between Palestinians and Jews…poor it out and drink it
Mispronouncing helps to envision certain things vivid
I would hum ‘Ohhh Jayyy,’ but ya’ll probably say I killed it
Saying the same shit like Simpson clothes worn out
Call you haters pussies like where a baby is born out
I’m a relapsing Scarface like shady with horns located south
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Re: D.O.A

Postby mcZu » Jul 8th, '09, 22:02

Coleon wrote:damn what'd you do just get 30 instrumentals and go crazy lol

but yeah I like this, kinda reached for a few punches but nothing majorely off point, decent flow, good rhymes and vocab

you're rhyming abstrackinda or something alot lately :y: fine with me lol


Lol, yeah, trying out some new shit.

Thanks for checking it out man :y:
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Re: D.O.A

Postby Almostlity » Jul 8th, '09, 22:23

I liked it :smoking:


*wishes that someone records over D.O.A :wub:
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