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Tried to fit a shitload of rhymes...

Postby Jay-19 » Jul 19th, '09, 18:00

Just something I wrote to try to fit as many rhymes as I could in one piece... tell me what you think!
And I know the lines may seem a little long, but it doesn't matter as long as I can flow it, which I can. :smoking:


spit on chicks tits, lick clits with a dick thinner than a sick stick figure
and slit the bitches wrist, kick her fixed tits if she insist to pick bigger
and all this rap shit just happened now I have to rap and wrap these...
damn rappers in packages, and I just take shots like a mental pacifist
I'm a characteristic, battle resistant, bastard who's glad to be twisted
I'm just bad and I'm vicious, they looking at me like I'm carrying pistols
struck a chord with this whore in a four-door Ford, but Lord am I bored
I took extension chord, strangled the fucking bitch right after I scored
then fucked her some more right at the morgue, now how sane is that?!
I'm a lunatic, truly sick, so let's stay to the fact and say I'm a maniac
motherfucking mental patient, slittin' up throats at the central station
use to lose it whenever I sense the hating and I'm friends with Jason
fuck, let's get wasted bring some moonshine or pharmaceutical drugs
can't remember shit 'cause of everything I took I got a beautiful buzz
and if you're tellin' Jay to go away, now that's a major mistake, ain't it?
I'll cut you up to pieces watch your blood float and tell Satan bathe in it
Last edited by Jay-19 on Jul 21st, '09, 00:08, edited 2 times in total.
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Re: Tried to fit a shitload of rhymes...

Postby Jay-19 » Jul 19th, '09, 18:30

SLMacDougall wrote::laughing: that was crazy as fuck lol, record it


I need to get Pro Tools LE 8 first... then I'll record like a motherfucker! :smoking:
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Re: Tried to fit a shitload of rhymes...

Postby Jay-19 » Jul 20th, '09, 22:09

I'm just gonna go ahead and bump this because I think it deserves a little peak... :8)
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Re: Tried to fit a shitload of rhymes...

Postby Ka0t1c » Jul 20th, '09, 23:57

pretty good .... "bathe" in it
oh yeah... and thanks for nothing too
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Re: Tried to fit a shitload of rhymes...

Postby Jay-19 » Jul 21st, '09, 00:07

Kaotic wrote:pretty good .... "bathe" in it



Sorry... :sweating:
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Re: Tried to fit a shitload of rhymes...

Postby JPearson » Jul 23rd, '09, 08:32

actually made sense in a sickening way, pretty good i liked it :y:
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Re: Tried to fit a shitload of rhymes...

Postby gutawafang » Jul 23rd, '09, 09:36

Shitload of rhymes yo. It's so fucking fast and clean. :y:
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Re: Tried to fit a shitload of rhymes...

Postby Fa-Q » Jul 23rd, '09, 20:23

wow...props man...so many rhymes in one line dude crazy
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