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quick 1st draft of 2nd verse to another love song

Postby JPearson » Jul 20th, '09, 09:12

I know that my love would keep growing even if me and you finished
Though my love would keep on going my whole heart would be diminished
Don’t even wanna think about it, let’s stay together, yeah I’ve wished it
‘cause your time is like a drug, I could get high up off of this shit
Time is money, na, time with you is more than that it’s life to me
Can’t picture being without you, can’t think what It’d be like to be
Spending time alone, away from you, it don’t seem right to me
Let’s keep it how it is, it’s me and you together rightfully
It’s heightening, the way I feel so good when you are here with me
You hearing me? I really hope you are because it’s clear to me
That me and you are perfect now, we go together perfectly
‘every second I spend with you’s a new moment that is dear to me
Whether we be chilling just at home or spending a night out
I have more fun than anyone, that’s one thing I’m right about
No matter what they’re doing, where they are don’t even have slight doubt
That I’m having a better time, you tired now? Ok turn the lights out

*edit* i know this may be my worst verse yet, n if anyone says so fair enough i'll appreciate being told the truth but i cant take JMG seriously anymore
Last edited by JPearson on Jul 20th, '09, 10:27, edited 1 time in total.
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Re: quick 1st draft of 2nd verse to another love song

Postby JMG » Jul 20th, '09, 10:07

lol lyrically it was shit even for a long song, it had flow but overall it was below average
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Re: quick 1st draft of 2nd verse to another love song

Postby JPearson » Jul 20th, '09, 10:20

appreciate the feed yeah but i aint gunna take anything from someone who just tried to diss me and straight away got killed off without a reply verse :y:
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Re: quick 1st draft of 2nd verse to another love song

Postby gutawafang » Jul 20th, '09, 12:59

I think it's pretty fine to melt a girl. I'd give 7/10. :y: Flow's good. :y: Multis good too. :y: Knowing that it was QUICK, I think you can do alot better tha this man. :flower:
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Re: quick 1st draft of 2nd verse to another love song

Postby JPearson » Jul 20th, '09, 13:07

lol cheers man, i actually respect your feedback so i'll take it in
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