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1st draft of love verse (i have a beat incase if flows odd)

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1st draft of love verse (i have a beat incase if flows odd)

Postby JPearson » Jul 21st, '09, 15:09

I’ll always have you in my heart
You’ve always been in it and you’ll stay in now we’re apart
Wish we could go back to the start
And when we get to this bit turn onto another path
Just wanted a life with you
I know we could’ve done it, dieing with you’s what I thought I’d do
Though out relationship is through
I’m so aware it’s happened just don’t wanna think it’s true
Now you are all I think about
I see and hear you everywhere, at home or when I’m out
Hope I get you back but filled with doubt
The doubt in me is flooding but the hope in me is in a drought
And I can’t deal with all the rain
Overflowing my emotions it feels like I’m drowned in rain
I’m wandering do you feel the same
Dya feel like you’ll never move on and your love will maintain
It will be like finding a nail in a coal mine
haystack
oh... like finding a haystack in a coal mine
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Re: 1st draft of love verse (i have a beat incase if flows odd)

Postby JPearson » Jul 21st, '09, 16:10

lol na that one was

i remember when i told ya
went quite thinking bout it turned around to hold ya
then i said them 3 words
them 3 words filled with never ending meaning still can't descirbe what i was feeling..........

yer i don't like using complex ryhmes in love songs coz it ruins the effect, same with complex flows really
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Re: 1st draft of love verse (i have a beat incase if flows odd)

Postby JPearson » Jul 21st, '09, 16:12

think i should carry it on?

just thought, dya think people think we live together all the time n talk across the room on tr posts? lol
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Re: 1st draft of love verse (i have a beat incase if flows odd)

Postby JPearson » Jul 21st, '09, 16:15

weird image.. i will actually, a whole song about the time u tell a girl you love her though is a bit much
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Re: 1st draft of love verse (i have a beat incase if flows odd)

Postby JPearson » Jul 21st, '09, 16:21

yer, i'll finish this one im workin on now n get crackin... u done anymore?
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Re: 1st draft of love verse (i have a beat incase if flows odd)

Postby JPearson » Jul 21st, '09, 16:24

send it to uni n say its work, ur doing media ;)
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Re: 1st draft of love verse (i have a beat incase if flows odd)

Postby JPearson » Jul 21st, '09, 16:26

i'm def helping out with that, loved being an advert superstar :8)
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Re: 1st draft of love verse (i have a beat incase if flows odd)

Postby JPearson » Jul 21st, '09, 16:28

lol should get me rich, cant think of a film ive seen where someone dint run around a garden in a straw hat
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Re: 1st draft of love verse (i have a beat incase if flows odd)

Postby JPearson » Jul 21st, '09, 16:37

lol u really shouldn't.. the ,usic vid tho yer
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