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I Love You

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Re: I Love You

Postby JPearson » Jul 21st, '09, 22:26

might just be my emma situation but i felt that 1, i mean felt myself go weird thinking bout her... like i keep sayin songs like this shouldnt be to lyrical or have complex flows, need a good balance between too much sould n too much lyrical rap... but i loved this 1... be back in a bit gotta cry n sing this on her front garden

i have about 60 more songs like this we should put that verse with 2 of mine, n u do another 1 n make a full song outa it
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Re: I Love You

Postby JPearson » Jul 21st, '09, 22:28

take ur time i have too many.. writing one now, find me help please..
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Re: I Love You

Postby James R. » Jul 21st, '09, 22:32

Good track man. Very emotional track. Mechanically it was cool, but nothing spectacular, but as you said, it wasn't your aim. I enjoyed reading it. More like poetry than rap. Good job bro.
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Re: I Love You

Postby JPearson » Jul 21st, '09, 22:45

yer i like to make em relatable, write about common love situations e.g missing the other person, thinkin bout the future, how u love em... keep everything simple to... and i dont like to write it just from the male point of view so girls could relate to :y:
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Re: I Love You

Postby gutawafang » Jul 22nd, '09, 03:46

girl, if you held 11 roses to a mirror the message couldn't be any clearer
in the refection you'd see, the 12 most beautiful things to me, so come nearer

Witht hat kind of line, any fucking GIRL would melt! :happy:

Dude, your love verses are melting even a guy like me! :D
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