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Postby D'Leh » Jul 25th, '09, 02:45

i just dropped a few lines 5 min ago tell me what do you think

Let me tell you a story, and it wont be nice
its really fucked up, you dont wanna hear it twice
it's really complex, let me simplify a rhyme
you're gonna search but you really cant find the light
theres a rope, a neck, just before the fight
a little girl telling God its about the time
killher self, yes killher self, yes that's right
but let flor sing the chorus for yall tonight
Let me eat your pussy while I shave you!
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Postby Emadyville » Jul 25th, '09, 03:20

Eh a little short and nothing really impressive in it, but not bad, keep writing :y:
Menzo wrote:Its cuz you're dope and Daddy Dubs. No one fucks with that


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Postby D'Leh » Jul 25th, '09, 03:30

thanks ...i just dropped that i know its short haha
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Postby InfInIte REnEgadE » Jul 25th, '09, 03:32

it builds up into a nice chorus that could be there. make that a whole song
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Rum and Pepsi has got your whole perception of me sketchy
Cuz when i stage-dive people are scared to catch me
Cuz all i do is curse and fuck
So when i do shrooms, you better give me 2 rooms
cuz im fuckin the first one up



When i die bury me butt naked and face down in the grass, so i can fuck the world while yall kiss my ass
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