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Re: Mad Mad World

Postby JPearson » Jul 25th, '09, 08:08

for a topic like this, as i said before, ryhmes n flows dont really come into it, its the feelings n this is obviously filled with deep feelings u have, perfect for what it is :y:
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Re: Mad Mad World

Postby JPearson » Jul 25th, '09, 08:24

lol its cool man, do what u do :y: for real tho this verse was all it shoulda been
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Re: Mad Mad World

Postby Drama Setter » Jul 25th, '09, 09:02

good job bro , It's very dope, thx chet

your best damn line :y:
drown me in my drink, please god just let me sink
I just sit here and think, life got me at the brinkett
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Re: Mad Mad World

Postby gutawafang » Jul 25th, '09, 09:16

Hey man, that was pretty good flow. I liked the story and concept of it. It rhymes well but the multis can be better. First two lines was dope man.

This too:
if that's what god had to do, then where's my story arc
got cast with a sorry part, my art slowly eats my heart

I just felt those lines. :y:
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Re: Mad Mad World

Postby James R. » Jul 25th, '09, 17:23

I like it actually. Like you said, it's not Anonymous style with all the rhyming and multies, but I enjoyed the rhyming. I liked the flow, I liked the message/concept, it was all good stuff man. Good job. You should drop more often.
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Re: Mad Mad World

Postby Solace » Jul 26th, '09, 01:24

I enjoyed it a lot even if it wasn't complex because you don't structure like a retard for one, and the emotion was there and only thing it lacked was multies...Which while reading I didn't even realize. Good piece.
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Re: Mad Mad World

Postby D'Leh » Jul 26th, '09, 01:27

man i try my best to came up with some like this but its hard
....good one chet!!!!! :b:
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Re: Mad Mad World

Postby Ice_Scarred » Jul 26th, '09, 03:13

Wow, I enjoyed this. It had a simple yet interesting rhyming pattern. It actually seems like your talking about stuff on this too. Like real relatable stuff, imo. Thats one of the greatest things I like to find in people's verses.

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