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A Week In My Life

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A Week In My Life

Postby D'Leh » Jul 26th, '09, 01:25

Yo its fucked i know
But, i’ve to let it out
Yo
im gonna try to let out me all this shit
with this words this pen, im about to spit
before all that man yo, pass me the weed
im start to show you the real fucked up shit
seems like my life its really upside down
my head its begining to jump around
my grandpa let me this week, and now
my grandma is dyin on the sorrow wow
my dad has no job. His name is Rob
last night my friend and i just got robbed
luckly the thief, took away his “pop”
i really know this rhyme is simple but
i had to let the demons out of my skull
so, this is it, this is a week in my life
my father its runnin away with his wife
yes i said wife so its not my mom
shit,i dont even have a fresh pussy to cum.



just finished that shit, i know the rhyme is simple, but its hard for me im spanish so maybe the multies and shit like that later haha...tell me what you think of this verse...thanks!!
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Re: A Week In My Life

Postby drasticlyhated » Jul 26th, '09, 03:31

i thought it was really good but you got to overcome your handicap and try to work on the flow :y: other wise good song bro :b: :b:
the shit i do most doers never done
ima fuck this beat ya bitch
you better come, better run this shit
i dont run from shit, i still b-beay
your ass like a fuckin drum stick
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Re: A Week In My Life

Postby D'Leh » Jul 27th, '09, 02:47

thanks man
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Re: A Week In My Life

Postby gutawafang » Jul 27th, '09, 02:49

It's quite simple. But it's all good man. Keep it coming. :y:
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Re: A Week In My Life

Postby D'Leh » Jul 27th, '09, 02:52

thanks man!!!
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Re: A Week In My Life

Postby ritchieA » Jul 27th, '09, 22:14

yh was quiet simple but keep ventin :y:
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