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Quick 10

Postby Solace » Jul 26th, '09, 15:24

Just kept going with it when I started it. 5-10 minutes so don't expect excellence :sweating:

You used to call me stupid and beat me by my own locker,
Now who's smarter, now that I'm pointing at you with a mossberg,
You're at a loss jerk, well right at this moment I got words,
Got you pissing in your XL pants like some fucking sparklers,
Childish like crayons and markers, know all like you a stalker,
Hit you where the spots hurt with a drumstick with Travis Barker's,
Name on it, bitch write it a play on it, that'll be a shocker,
Sleep on it, better be honest, you a old bitch with a walker,
In my dreams, I hear "Why me!?", and continue to stomp her,
Get her in a cage, hit her with some rage as I have to lock her,
Up...You can get fucked, I'll drown you in a bottle of water,
You enter your house, say Hi to mom just to notice its not her.
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Re: Quick 10

Postby JPearson » Jul 28th, '09, 04:46

Good verse for people who got bullied to listen to... could help em vent good story :y:
It will be like finding a nail in a coal mine
haystack
oh... like finding a haystack in a coal mine
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Re: Quick 10

Postby ritchieA » Jul 28th, '09, 10:38

its ok not ur best though :y:
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Re: Quick 10

Postby Solace » Jul 28th, '09, 14:11

Thanks guys, thought it would never get a comment :y:
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Re: Quick 10

Postby Robbie G » Jul 28th, '09, 18:40

damn..your really into the aggressive raps aren't you. :p

The lyrics were fine. nothing too special or that hasn't been done but not bad. :y:
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Re: Quick 10

Postby Solace » Jul 29th, '09, 00:28

Thanks Shady Babie for checking it!
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