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Fa-Q - My Time Has Come (My Favorite)

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Fa-Q - My Time Has Come (My Favorite)

Postby Fa-Q » Jul 27th, '09, 20:11

Ive always wanted to paint these walls
Phones off the hook I doubt it recieves calls
til after each one of my knees falls
the last thing Ill remember is that one joke girl
the last thing ill see is the gun smoke swirl
Im looking down the barrel to say Ive seen my doom
all my belongings are together in a cleaned room
but I know there will be one stain of blood
i put the tarp down to try and contain the flood
Maybe my coffin will be visible through the rainy mud
My tombs isnt a hospital
so call an ambulance as soon as possible
it wont matter Ill die a groom alone
my spouse a gret tombstone
this morning my final sunrise shined
my pupils ajust as each tries to find
jokes on me now my eyes are blind

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I guess my time has come
as soon as this rhyme is done
ill be done, so guard your heart before the next girl takes it
and breaks it, my time has come

The hallways cleared
which i always feared
shes the slut im the dunce
for some reason all the lockers shut at once
My ears perk up at the sound of her voice
but how could I tell her around other boys
now shes around her other dimwit friends
If she only knew I didnt care about her split ends
even though carbons free
she made it hard to breathe
I found myself doodleing her name in a heart
oh no here comes a flame and a spark
but as soon as she brought it
she doused it with rain and the dark
I boarded her plane and she taught me how to fly
my friend, my enemy, who shot me out the sky
so ask yourself when did you cross the line
cause your sanity cost me mine

___chorus

my lightbulb is burned out
I wonder how I would have turned out
doctor lawyer would I have gotton any taller
would I save a life
after 20 years would I have craved my wive
but my time is up no more hours til my doom
all these flowers fill my tomb
now my spirit towers the moon
and it reminisces that your words were a new poison found
now your tears moisten the ground
next time you break a heart
find your cold heart and take it apart
and see your rotting from the inside out
I hope your tears never dry out
and when people ask what your crying about
youll say this note and every haunting lyric
was him in a form of a taunting spirit
So just put on that fake smile
but after you read this i hope it takes a while
__chours
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Re: Fa-Q - My Time Has Come (My Favorite)

Postby JPearson » Jul 27th, '09, 20:19

Few of the ryhmes were good, structure n flow seemed a bit off.. dunno if uve written this to a beat but just seemed a bit off... keep goin man
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Postby Fa-Q » Jul 27th, '09, 20:36

JPearson wrote:Few of the ryhmes were good, structure n flow seemed a bit off.. dunno if uve written this to a beat but just seemed a bit off... keep goin man

I did write it too a beat<<< lol sounded like I was mad>>> it is a SHADOWVILLE beat and its perfect. the only reason I havent recorded it is my voice is the same when I have funny songs when i have serious songs.
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Re: Fa-Q - My Time Has Come (My Favorite)

Postby JPearson » Jul 27th, '09, 20:52

is it about a girl or death? or a girl that causes your death? :D
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Postby Fa-Q » Jul 27th, '09, 20:55

JPearson wrote:is it about a girl or death? or a girl that causes your death? :D

no its about a kid that killed himself because a girl told him she liked him but she said it was just a joke...its a real story i wrote it on
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Re: Fa-Q - My Time Has Come (My Favorite)

Postby JPearson » Jul 27th, '09, 21:16

o shit, deep stuff... record it!!!
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Re: Fa-Q - My Time Has Come (My Favorite)

Postby Fa-Q » Jul 28th, '09, 02:18

JPearson wrote:o shit, deep stuff... record it!!!

yea i know i need a mic BAD
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Re: Fa-Q - My Time Has Come (My Favorite)

Postby gutawafang » Jul 28th, '09, 02:21

That was so emotional and the flow was GREAT. Yeah, record it homie. :happy:
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Postby Fa-Q » Jul 28th, '09, 02:52

gutawafang wrote:That was so emotional and the flow was GREAT. Yeah, record it homie. :happy:

thanks man...and i need to get the right tone in my voice for this song...dont wannna fuck up a serious topic like this you know
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Re: Fa-Q - My Time Has Come (My Favorite)

Postby JPearson » Jul 28th, '09, 02:52

whats wrong with your voice for this song?
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Re: Fa-Q - My Time Has Come (My Favorite)

Postby Fa-Q » Jul 28th, '09, 02:56

JPearson wrote:whats wrong with your voice for this song?

lol it always sounds like im joking around...and with a topic like this....kind of fucked up
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Postby JPearson » Jul 28th, '09, 02:57

lol yer but why? too high? what makes it sound jokey...
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Postby Fa-Q » Jul 28th, '09, 03:00

lol no its like...idk like it sounds like Im holding my breath but Im not...
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Re: Fa-Q - My Time Has Come (My Favorite)

Postby JPearson » Jul 28th, '09, 03:02

lol hard to imagine what u mean so dont know what to say... just record it, if it dont sound right keep experimenting with it until it does :y:
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Postby Fa-Q » Jul 28th, '09, 03:07

JPearson wrote:lol hard to imagine what u mean so dont know what to say... just record it, if it dont sound right keep experimenting with it until it does :y:

k thanks i think this will be one of the last songs I DO record when I record....first will be "Im the kinda guy" I love that song
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