Escape [not finished]

[mcZu]

First verse and chorus, put the progress of this song on hold for the moment.. So any feedback is welcome, especially constructive

[First verse]
My mind a villa, with a slum view –call it India
Temper of a killer; imprisoned mind like Mandela
Patient like Gandhi, tryna break out… but I
Can’t leave ‘till I have that Scylla –will I
Ever walk a straight path…
Or am I doomed to circle ‘round this rotary for days –fast?
Reaching for the sun at midnight
And as soon as that cuckoo is heard I switch sides
Wake up again at night; clear sky view, right…
Stuck on horizontal 8 avenue –with a canceled flight
Feeling like benign cancer that might…
Takeover but got spotted with keen sight
So I blame Zu… yeah right; behind some defense lines
Getting your point over is a matter of hindsight –and the right mind
So I write lines, to escape the façade and to say
Zu stays on that route ‘till he can say touché

[Chorus]
Take me away, yeah away…
Just make me escape…
Past the past ‘till the future is safe

[mcZu]

i thought it was really good will ya do audio?

Thanks Scotyy

Yeah I'll record this as soon as I finish it and get my hands on a decent mic.

[Drama Setter]

Nice Drop MCZU , your chorus is Dope

[mcZu]

Nice Drop MCZU , your chorus is Dope

Thank you Drama

[ritchieA]

yh that a gd shout scott, yh man u should do audio wud sound sick

[mcZu]

yh that a gd shout scott, yh man u should do audio wud sound sick

Thanks JP (right? lol), I'll as soon as I get a better mic

[Xray]

Shit is dramatic as hell. Seems like you were extremely pissed, and you just wanted to escape BADLY, cause damn that shit was INTENSE! Seems like you also switched your style of writing, seems more street. I think thats the best Zu verse I've read. Flow was really good man, for real great job.

[mcZu]

Shit is dramatic as hell. Seems like you were extremely pissed, and you just wanted to escape BADLY, cause damn that shit was INTENSE! Seems like you also switched your style of writing, seems more street. I think thats the best Zu verse I've read. Flow was really good man, for real great job.

Thanks Sajjad