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4/5 Of A General Storm

Postby mcZu » Aug 2nd, '09, 18:03

I Ramadan with the pen; famine –bring back I-Min*, vital with vicoden
Vitamin flow, vital minutes show; how I flow.. like a ship from a Viking
You dying with smoke, call you a blunt –I hunt; youz the pray
Guess that’s why you be screaming ‘I-Min*’.. Call you a month –you may
..get on a beat, though you dusty and shit like attics and behinds
When the 5Stars make a track, we leave a General traffic jam behind
We rhyme.. like a bad game of Tetris –we on top
Our will-is; stubborn –making it ‘die?.. heart’ is too rhythmic to stop
But we aint actors.. We a royal flush in the game –‘cause we poke-HER
Leave enemies toaster-ed; break bread and stay sober
Generalize the game, the Generals take over –realize it’s soon over
Like I said in 2.5, we the answer to ‘die-who?’ –that’s why we General Motors
We’ll never fall –we just skipped a couple of months
We that concentrated; our lyrical pages equal Hitler’s ‘Mein Kampf’
Infinite epigram -viewed in a lyrical reigning motion; a true author
Fourth part of a general storm –a rotary panorama general slaughter

*I-Min is an alter ego I sometimes use when I write, pronounced as 'I'm in' or 'Amen.'
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Re: 4/5 Of A General Storm

Postby MC Anonymous » Aug 2nd, '09, 18:13

FUCKKKK :worship: :worship: :worship: :worship:
MOTHERFUCKERS BETTER RECOGNIZE.
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Re: 4/5 Of A General Storm

Postby Solace » Aug 2nd, '09, 18:17

Damn that was dope!
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Re: 4/5 Of A General Storm

Postby mcZu » Aug 2nd, '09, 18:23

Thanks Anon, Scotty and Solace :b: :b:
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Re: 4/5 Of A General Storm

Postby Spyder » Aug 2nd, '09, 22:32

ill shit man really, one of the best out of the 4 so far :y:
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Re: 4/5 Of A General Storm

Postby Arabian Shady » Aug 3rd, '09, 12:18

well, written B, flow was difficult at points but lyrics were dope :y:
well writteh homes :y:
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Shit is BACKSTAGE,Cause the front page aint worth Kashmir and Palestine.
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Re: 4/5 Of A General Storm

Postby mcZu » Aug 6th, '09, 16:55

Coleon wrote:
like a bad game of Tetris –we on top


yeah bullshit, J-U-Ice used that shit WAYYY back

:tounge2:

everything else was good :y:


Yeah he did, but in a different way. He said something like ''You couldn't reach the top in a bad game of tetris.'' lol.. So not the same ;)

But thanks for checking :y:
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Re: 4/5 Of A General Storm

Postby MC Anonymous » Aug 6th, '09, 16:59

Coleon wrote:.....uhmm yeah that"s pretty much the same?

Dude shut the fuck up. You bit LL's diss and swapped words in our battle. Don't talk shit if you do the same thing.

you's a fairnut, so ask ANABIS he ain't understanding this
cause 99% of his rhymes don't make sense, friends don't exist
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Cause' 99% of his fans, don't exist.
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Re: 4/5 Of A General Storm

Postby MC Anonymous » Aug 6th, '09, 17:04

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Re: 4/5 Of A General Storm

Postby mcZu » Aug 6th, '09, 17:12

Coleon wrote:.....uhmm yeah that"s pretty much the same?


98% of the topics used in punchlines has already been used, so no, it aint prett much the same.
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Re: 4/5 Of A General Storm

Postby mcZu » Aug 6th, '09, 17:29

^Lol, it wasn't bitten. But w.e, let's not turn this in to a pointless debate. Thanks for checking it out Coleon :y:
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Re: 4/5 Of A General Storm

Postby mcZu » Aug 6th, '09, 17:44

Coleon wrote:i've checked out i think 3 of these general storms and they've been nice :y: you have a wierd yet cool style, harder to actually spit but it's really unique


Thanks, bro. :b:

It's actually quite easy to spit, 'cause I write it down the way the rythme goes, so the flow is broken up, like a pause here, sped up there, etc. For the reader it might seem 'strange' but in fact it's pretty easy to put on a beat.
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