SOmething I wrote

[BILI]

Totally fucked up at the moment,no way to get out of shit that I`m in
Theres only a preyer and hope that God`ll forgive me for my sins
For all those mean and fucked up things I did ever since
I came to Earth,since my mom gave my birth,she hoped I`ll worth
At least something when I grew up,that I`ll at least became a good man
But I even fucked that up,I was even more loyal to my hood,damn
Now I can only sit and cry,cause when you turn your back to your own blood man
You become a monster,your no more a normal human being
I hope you`ll all agree,that thsi is a right time for some changes

tips please cause I just started to write this shit

[D'Leh]

nice lyrics bili nice flow to!

[BILI]

thx man

[Fa-Q]

good shit man....id like more tho...I wold like a song cause tis was Ill

[BILI]

thx guys

[BILI]

good shit man....id like more tho...I wold like a song cause tis was Ill

and I have no mic so......

[emzee-frenzy]

nice man , write some more and holla!

[Fa-Q]

good shit man....id like more tho...I wold like a song cause tis was Ill

and I have no mic so......

yea i know same here....

[BILI]

nice man , write some more and holla!

thx man

[JPearson]

just starting that's good write a bit more though, gives u and us a better look at ur talent

[BILI]

just starting that's good write a bit more though, gives u and us a better look at ur talent

thx ....yeah I just started to write...and yeah I`ll be more active bout this writings from now on

[BILI]

I`d appreciate some tips too

[BILI]

good title


i thought I wrote it there for a second...

wtf...lol

[Ice_Scarred]

Short and Sweet shit. This didn't even need to be a full-fledged song to be good. Flow was on point, rhyming was dope....track was raw. You said your just starting out? Than dude your off to a REALLY good start. My very first verse I ever made was when I was 3 and it wasn't written, it was spoken. I had no flow, rhymes or nothing, I just wanted to have fun with my Brother cause he raps / records.

First written verse was about being rich and being like Batman...yeah pathetic I know, I was about 8...lol

Keep it droppin man!

[Fa-Q]

Short and Sweet shit. This didn't even need to be a full-fledged song to be good. Flow was on point, rhyming was dope....track was raw. You said your just starting out? Than dude your off to a REALLY good start. My very first verse I ever made was when I was 3 and it wasn't written, it was spoken. I had no flow, rhymes or nothing, I just wanted to have fun with my Brother cause he raps / records.

First written verse was about being rich and being like Batman...yeah pathetic I know, I was about 8...lol

Keep it droppin man!

lol batman...damn i wish i could go back to not caring about the world...