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world of war

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world of war

Postby Ka0t1c » Aug 8th, '09, 21:23

sorry i shortened my story before
now i'm going forward
showing my scars in my world of war
cuz i'm growing up more

and since i want order restored
it's my turn to restart
and open a door
for the corners to part
so then my horror's over

i can sew up my heart
and feel normal n warm
to enjoy a new spark
that's important or mourn
from disappointment, it's hard

but it's surely my chore
and it's my choice to take charge
cuz if this burden's ignored
my voice won't get large
all my words would just fall
and i won't be heard very far

then my journey i'd call
worthless n dull
adjourned cuz of flaws
cuz i curled in a ball
since i let the poison install
in my circuits to stall
my voyage embarked
to determine just how
i'll exterminate our
dark serpeant, allah





i structured this piece like that b/c i want everyone to understand every part where it rhymes or sounds similar
oh yeah... and thanks for nothing too
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Re: world of war

Postby mcZu » Aug 9th, '09, 17:25

I may not agree with the message, but it flowed pretty good.
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Re: world of war

Postby Ka0t1c » Aug 9th, '09, 18:28

thanx
oh yeah... and thanks for nothing too
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