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Happy National Day

Postby gutawafang » Aug 9th, '09, 16:49

It's 9th August still. 13 more mins to 10th August. Hence I decided to pick this pen up and try to make an attempt to write something about how I love Singapore. I admit it does not have that much flow. I just love Singapore. I wrote one verse and one chorus and I'm still THINKING if I should write verse 2 and 3.

Tell me what you think. :happy: :happy: :happy:

Verse1
Ripples form waves at every shore
Smiles on the faces when it shines or the rain pours
Jets and planes dive, boats and ferries soar
Kids and foreigners awe at the Merlion's spit and roar
Fishes fly away, seagulls swim all day
Wishes over cakes, we make them anyway
Once a year we celebrate with fire cannons, march, parade
No matter the age, color, height or mind state
Call this patriotism, I'm a soldier of love for my home
Superhero against tsunamis, wwinds, and cyclones
I'll be the Adnan, when I die, I'll die known
Simply by reading my rhymes and my fly poem
Dear children will jump around
Rap along and mime the sounds
Adolescents and young adults
They just grant us the same results
So while you think about how you gonna sing along
This song will give you Red Bull if your wings are gone

Chorus
Fiery red blood top
Purely white heart's bottom
Five stars for the rating
All left's the crescent moon waiting
To be full but still as beautiful
For anybody's fool, go ahead and drool
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Re: Happy National Day

Postby mcZu » Aug 9th, '09, 17:18

Gotta go with what Coleon said, it's not bad.. but not excellent. Enjoyable, keep it up :y:
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Re: Happy National Day

Postby gutawafang » Aug 9th, '09, 17:25

Thanks for checking Zu and Coleon. :happy:
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