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Did i piss you off?

Postby J Roc » Aug 10th, '09, 00:40

Would it piss you off if i Said George Bush Was a Cool Guy?
Would it Piss You Off if i said Mount Everest Was Too high?
Would it piss you off If i Said Pac Was Overated?
Would it Piss You Off If i Kept My Style & Never Changed It?
Would it piss you off If i said Micheal Touched Me?
Or Would it piss you off If i said Mariah's Ugly?
Would it Piss You Off if i said Abe Was a Liar?
Or Would it Piss You Off If i Told Slim To Retire?
Would it Piss You Off If i Said You Look Like Mac?
Basically Im Asking Would It Piss You Off If You Look Like a Fag ... lol
Would it Piss You Off if i said Pac Isn't Hiding?
That I Got Him In My Basement And He's Barely Surviving?
Would it piss you off if i Said elton's Boyfriend is Straight?
Or Would it Piss You Off If i Said It NEVER Rained For Forty Day's?
Would it Piss You Off if i said I won the Beef With Rain?
And Would it piss you off if i Never Stopped Dropping Names?
Would it piss you offf If This Shit Was Hot?
Or Would it Piss You Off...If i said i Wanted to Piss You Off?

i dunnnooo i needed a Concept to Write About & im a Lil Tired ... Thoughtttsss?
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Re: Did i piss you off?

Postby D'Leh » Aug 10th, '09, 00:42

its was great dude!!!! really nice! :y:
Let me eat your pussy while I shave you!
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Re: Did i piss you off?

Postby BILI » Aug 10th, '09, 00:43

I loved the concept it reminded me to If I had........but pretty cool drop...I love it,Its something really fresh..............and it wouldn`t piss me off..lol except that first line about Pac being overrated :angry: :angry:
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Re: Did i piss you off?

Postby J Roc » Aug 10th, '09, 00:44

haha Thank's Guy's ^^^^^^^ .. i added 2 Line's at the End Cuz i thought it fit lol ... & Pac Made Some Hella Nice Fucking Song's lol .... More Peep's Appreciated :)
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Re: Did i piss you off?

Postby BILI » Aug 10th, '09, 00:47

J roc wrote:haha Thank's Guy's ^^^^^^^ .. i added 2 Line's at the End Cuz i thought it fit lol ... & Pac Made Some Hella Nice Fucking Song's lol ....

wow last 2 lines are fuckin dope I mean really hot(so it wouldn`t piss me of if you say this is hot...lol)I just love it
And yeah Pac made some dope songs(actually he made songs that I bump every day..lol)
but dope drop very innovative :y: :y: :y:
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Re: Did i piss you off?

Postby Steve Spag » Aug 10th, '09, 01:12

Extremely dope! Love the concept behind the whole verse, and your untouchable flow mixed with your great wordplay made for an interesting read!

Keep that shit up, man!
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Re: Did i piss you off?

Postby J Roc » Aug 10th, '09, 01:18

$(@TTY B@Y wrote:someones jealous of my looks :flutter:


Hah Someone's Jealous Of The Skill Level Im On :whistle: ... & Naw . The Pic i Posted I Was Burnt In ... Was a Bad PicTuree Ocky i only Have a Few On the net tho , just the ones other people put up Cuzzz i don't have the cords to upload anytthing lol .

&& Thank's For Reading Stevey Props Man :y:
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Re: Did i piss you off?

Postby Solace » Aug 11th, '09, 01:53

That was really good J Roc, the mutlies, flow, and the funny wit. Keep it up dude.
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Re: Did i piss you off?

Postby gutawafang » Aug 11th, '09, 02:27

It pissed me off.


NAH, just joking dude. :happy:

That shit was awesome. Good flow. Good concept. Can't wait for the REAL thing Roc. :y:
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Re: Did i piss you off?

Postby Arabian Shady » Aug 11th, '09, 12:32

nice flow, gr8 structure homes...nice read, simple and sick :y:
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