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Sadness

Postby BILI » Aug 10th, '09, 15:10

This world`s just not for me,thats the way it has to be
Its just simply cause theres too much stress for me
Days are just passin by,I dont even get a chance to tell`em hi
My friends left me,alone in this cold world,when they remember to call I`ll die
I`m crying every day and my parents are wondering why?
Pains soo deep,life is sour,just like a wine thats cheap
But I just need to keep my head up,and not fell into eternal sleep
And I came to conclusion about who my best friend is...its weed
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Re: Sadness

Postby classthe_king » Aug 10th, '09, 19:56

This is your best piece yet, I think your getting alot better, felt the sadness in the song.

You mind checkin out one of my songs :flower:
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Re: Sadness

Postby BILI » Aug 11th, '09, 14:54

classthe_king wrote:This is your best piece yet, I think your getting alot better, felt the sadness in the song.

You mind checkin out one of my songs :flower:

thx man I appreciate it a lot...Ima check something of yours right now :y:
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Re: Sadness

Postby gutawafang » Aug 11th, '09, 15:43

That's good Bili. I see you're practicing a lot. Seems like one drop a day from you man. Keep dropping.

For this piece, it was poetic so I couldn't rap it out. Nevertheless it rhymes, so it's all good man. :y:
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Re: Sadness

Postby BILI » Aug 11th, '09, 15:46

gutawafang wrote:That's good Bili. I see you're practicing a lot. Seems like one drop a day from you man. Keep dropping.

For this piece, it was poetic so I couldn't rap it out. Nevertheless it rhymes, so it's all good man. :y:

thx a lot man :flower:
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Re: Sadness

Postby kalbird » Aug 11th, '09, 20:46

That was so cool :y: I loved it.....
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Re: Sadness

Postby ThugAngel » Aug 11th, '09, 20:53

That is very good man.
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Re: Sadness

Postby BILI » Aug 11th, '09, 21:04

thx guys :flower:
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